1. Notification emails are working properly again. Please check your email spam folder and if you see any emails from the Cantina there, make sure to mark them as "Not Spam". This will help a lot to whitelist the emails and to stop them going to spam.
    Dismiss Notice
  2. IMPORTANT! To be able to create new threads and rate posts, you need to have at least 30 posts in The Cantina.
    Dismiss Notice
  3. Before posting a new thread, check the list with similar threads that will appear when you start typing the thread's title.
    Dismiss Notice

Design a Rogue One crawl. . . .

Discussion in 'Rogue One' started by SKB, Dec 20, 2016.

  1. SKB

    SKB Force Sensitive

    Joined:
    Dec 21, 2015
    Posts:
    2,448
    Likes Received:
    2,916
    Trophy Points:
    11,367
    Credits:
    6,419
    Ratings:
    +7,145 / 413 / -290
    So Rogue One didn't have an opening crawl. But what if there had been one?
    I've imagined one of my own and also a few scene edits to fit it. . . .


    ROGUE ONE
    Fifteen years ago, research scientist GALEN ERSO was captured by the GALACTIC EMPIRE. Galen was then forced to work on the DEATH STAR, a secret space station designed to destroy entire planets.

    Galen's young daughter JYN ERSO narrowly avoided Imperial capture with help from Rebel extremist SAW GERRERA. Jyn, now an adult, survives as a petty criminal on the planet WOBANI.

    Meanwhile, Imperial pilot BODHI ROOK has defected to the moon JEDHA, smuggling a secret holographic message from Galen Erso, hoping to prevent the Death Star from being completed....


    Animated Crawl: https://brorlandi.github.io/StarWarsIntroCreator/#!/AL2wckxM4Bd6bM1pUyen


    ;)
     
    #1 SKB, Dec 20, 2016
    Last edited: Jan 16, 2018
    • Like Like x 2
    • Wise Wise x 1
  2. BigGuy219

    BigGuy219 Clone Commander

    Joined:
    Apr 8, 2016
    Posts:
    80
    Likes Received:
    141
    Trophy Points:
    387
    Credits:
    479
    Ratings:
    +269 / 2 / -2
    Thirty nine years ago
    GEORGE LUCAS made
    a film that changed a
    generation.

    In the span of a
    generation no filmmaker
    has been able to come
    up with an original idea.

    So here is the story of
    what happened before that
    movie you liked with some
    of the characters you liked.
     
    • Like Like x 3
    • Great Post Great Post x 1
    • Funny Funny x 1
    • Trolling Trolling x 1
  3. Bargwill Tomder

    Bargwill Tomder Rebel Commander

    Joined:
    Dec 20, 2016
    Posts:
    218
    Likes Received:
    438
    Trophy Points:
    2,992
    Credits:
    880
    Ratings:
    +639 / 19 / -3
    Episode III.V

    ROGUE ONE

    The Clone Wars are over, and the
    galaxy has entered a period of
    rebuilding.

    Idealistic scientist Galen Erso has
    gone into hiding after learning
    that his research into kyber
    crystals fueled the empire's new
    super-weapon, the DEATH STAR.

    Meanwhile, the Empire's elites
    jostle for power, hoping to catch
    the favor of the Emperor....

    ---

    How it would look: https://brorlandi.github.io/StarWarsIntroCreator/#!/AKZSLy8FcaORWgnGy1YC
     
    • Like Like x 3
    • Great Post Great Post x 2
  4. DarthWalker

    DarthWalker Force Sensitive

    Joined:
    May 18, 2015
    Posts:
    1,267
    Likes Received:
    4,427
    Trophy Points:
    12,117
    Credits:
    5,582
    Ratings:
    +6,027 / 87 / -43
    upload_2016-12-21_8-46-13.png
     
    • Funny Funny x 8
    • Great Post Great Post x 1
    • Original Original x 1
  5. Bargwill Tomder

    Bargwill Tomder Rebel Commander

    Joined:
    Dec 20, 2016
    Posts:
    218
    Likes Received:
    438
    Trophy Points:
    2,992
    Credits:
    880
    Ratings:
    +639 / 19 / -3
    I can't like on a post yet, so let me just say, Bravo DarthWalker, Bravo!
     
    • Like Like x 4
    • Friendly Friendly x 1
  6. Righteous Smoke

    Righteous Smoke Clone Trooper

    Joined:
    Dec 21, 2016
    Posts:
    40
    Likes Received:
    80
    Trophy Points:
    52
    Credits:
    253
    Ratings:
    +102 / 2 / -0
    There's a 330 page crawl available already. Its called Catalyst.
     
    • Funny Funny x 3
  7. cawatrooper

    cawatrooper Jedi General

    Joined:
    Nov 14, 2016
    Posts:
    4,027
    Likes Received:
    16,870
    Trophy Points:
    145,167
    Credits:
    16,589
    Ratings:
    +20,915 / 60 / -37
    "Fifteen years ago, scientist GALEN ERSO was taken hostage by Imperial DIRECTOR KRENNIC to continue work on a terrifying SECRET WEAPON.

    In an effort to try to sabotage the project, Galen sent an Imperial pilot BODHI ROOK to bring sensitive data to the REBELLION. Unfortunately, Rook was taken captive by Rebel schism leader SAW GUERERRA.

    Meanwhile, Rebellion agent CASSIAN ANDOR recieves word that Galen's daughter, JYN ERSO, is being held in an Imperial labor camp. The Rebel Alliance believes that the may be key to meeting with Guererra, retrieving Galen's message, and ultimately discovering what Galen's legacy is capable of."


    This way, a lot of the choppy exposition can be cut out of the film. Also, I like Cassion going after Jyn instead of Bodhi, as it is more direct and to the point.
     
    • Like Like x 1
  8. AstromechRecords

    AstromechRecords Jedi General

    Joined:
    Oct 10, 2015
    Posts:
    16,749
    Likes Received:
    15,002
    Trophy Points:
    148,277
    Credits:
    19,661
    Ratings:
    +26,299 / 845 / -253
    One Week before The Tantive IV was captured, a group of Rebels were able to secure plans at a cost.
    Don't worry, Jar Jar isnt in this even though it's a prequel.
    But don't get too attached to the characters.
     
    • Funny Funny x 3
  9. Background Character

    Background Character Rebel Official

    Joined:
    Oct 20, 2015
    Posts:
    436
    Likes Received:
    1,075
    Trophy Points:
    6,042
    Credits:
    2,161
    Ratings:
    +1,935 / 90 / -66
    The fact that the film starts with a flashback 13 years before the main film makes the crawl tricky in that it always tells what is happening at that moment in time in which the film starts. It does not tell what is definitely going to happen in the movie you are about to watch. This is probably one reason why there was no crawl. Or, they could've opened the film with on Jyn in prison and then recalling the flashback from that point. But any crawl would've told about the growth of the Rebellion, with new systems joining the cause, the establishment of a Rebel fleet and base on Yavin 4:


    The galaxy is at a breaking point. The oppressive control of the GALACTIC EMPIRE has motivated several star systems to rise up and form an alliance determined to oppose the Emperor and restore liberty to a people suffering under his tyranny.

    The REBEL ALLIANCE has assembled a formidable fleet, and have established a hidden base on the fourth moon of Yavin. They act with great risk to their own lives as the Empire seeks to mercilessly eradicate their fragile band and everything that they stand for.

    Motivated by intelligence of the development a terrible new Imperial weapon, the Alliance seeks to act quickly to disrupt the progress on its completion, which gravely threatens the Rebellion and any hope for the cause of freedom…
     
    #9 Background Character, Dec 21, 2016
    Last edited: Dec 21, 2016
    • Like Like x 1
  10. Lord Denton

    Lord Denton Rebel Commander

    Joined:
    Dec 17, 2015
    Posts:
    128
    Likes Received:
    308
    Trophy Points:
    2,302
    Credits:
    841
    Ratings:
    +466 / 6 / -0
    ROGUE ONE

    The Clone Wars are over. From the ashes of
    the Old Republic, the GALACTIC EMPIRE
    has risen to bring order to the broken pieces
    of the galaxy.

    The Jedi, guardians of peace, have fallen and
    faded into history and myth. As the power of
    the Empire spreads, in secret they have constructed
    a weapon that will destroy any form of resistance.

    In order to complete this dreaded DEATH STAR,
    the Empire has hunted down renowned scientist
    and idealist GALEN ERSO, the only man who
    can create the main weapon. In such times,
    few dare dream of hope...
     
    • Like Like x 5
    • Great Post Great Post x 1
  11. SKB

    SKB Force Sensitive

    Joined:
    Dec 21, 2015
    Posts:
    2,448
    Likes Received:
    2,916
    Trophy Points:
    11,367
    Credits:
    6,419
    Ratings:
    +7,145 / 413 / -290
    Here's a link to bring your Crawls to life. Just paste in your text, copy your finished crawl's URL and paste it back here for others to watch.
    There is a The Force Awakens crawl already preset for guidance.
    Remember to remove the Episode number part, and always end the third paragraph with a ". . . ."

    https://brorlandi.github.io/StarWarsIntroCreator/

    ;)
     
    • Like Like x 2
    • Informative Informative x 1
  12. Disneylandfan4life

    Disneylandfan4life Rebel General

    Joined:
    Nov 14, 2015
    Posts:
    513
    Likes Received:
    891
    Trophy Points:
    4,567
    Credits:
    2,105
    Ratings:
    +1,369 / 21 / -7
    Something Something Something Dark Side!
    Something Something Something Complete!

    And if you get that reference, you are one of my favorite people!
    =D
     
  13. DEKKA129

    DEKKA129 Professional Slinger of Balderdash
    Staff Member

    Joined:
    Jul 3, 2014
    Posts:
    760
    Likes Received:
    1,548
    Trophy Points:
    8,249
    Credits:
    2,562
    Ratings:
    +2,415 / 24 / -4
    Given the fact that Rogue One opens with a flashback, it seems like the logical place for an opening crawl would be exactly where they put the title - after the scenes on Lah'mu, and right before Cassian's first scene on the Ring of Kafrene. That way, the crawl would set the stage for the main story, rather than focusing on the flashback.

    Therefore, in some Bizarro World parallel universe in which I had any say in the matter whatsoever, I'd have suggested something like this:


    ROGUE ONE
    (A Star Wars Story)

    The galaxy trembles in the iron
    grip of the evil Galactic Empire,
    its citizens living in constant terror
    of arrest - or worse - at the hands
    of the Emperor's ruthless soldiers.

    On hundreds of oppressed worlds,
    resistance groups have formed in
    opposition to Imperial tyranny. The
    Rebel Alliance seeks to rally these
    groups into a united front against
    the Empire

    Rebel agent Cassian Andor, chasing
    rumors of a mysterious Imperial military
    project, has traveled deep into the Outer
    Rim territories to meet with one of his
    underground contacts...
     
  14. Lord Denton

    Lord Denton Rebel Commander

    Joined:
    Dec 17, 2015
    Posts:
    128
    Likes Received:
    308
    Trophy Points:
    2,302
    Credits:
    841
    Ratings:
    +466 / 6 / -0
    • Great Post Great Post x 3
  15. DEKKA129

    DEKKA129 Professional Slinger of Balderdash
    Staff Member

    Joined:
    Jul 3, 2014
    Posts:
    760
    Likes Received:
    1,548
    Trophy Points:
    8,249
    Credits:
    2,562
    Ratings:
    +2,415 / 24 / -4
    • Like Like x 1
  16. Solo

    Solo Rebel Official

    Joined:
    Sep 21, 2015
    Posts:
    644
    Likes Received:
    1,451
    Trophy Points:
    6,517
    Credits:
    2,047
    Ratings:
    +2,745 / 48 / -19
    • Like Like x 1
Loading...

Share This Page