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(MySW) The Skywalker Saga

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Dryden Valiance, Nov 10, 2021.

  1. Dryden Valiance

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    1. So it's time to share my fanfics (finally), but first I want to share my general concept and the changes I make to fix some of my problems I have with the original Saga.If you have read my presentation you are already that my rewrite project is very big, not only am I rewriting the original 3 trilogy but I am adding one more plus 3 spin-offs trilogies.
    2. My version of the stories is not as "Family Friendly" as the Lucas or the Disney movie, they contain more violence and sex with an approach similar of GoT (but with much less nudity).I like Star Wars movies, but at times I have felt them a little too "harmless" and "hopeful", I like stories a little more grounded and mature (one of my favorite directors is Tarantino so I try to inject some of his style in Star Wars), as a touchstone I used Firefly, Battlestar Galactica and Cowboy Bepop with I think they have a more adult edge
    3. One of the main reasons I started this project was to condense all the films into one narrative and how different the Saga would be if Lucas started with Episode I, so a lot of things in the original trilogy don't have the same impact: the "" I am your father "is not shocking because we will already know Luke's origin.
    4. For a better clarity I have divided my fanfiction into three threads (I was going to create a thread for each single story but I would have flooded this section of the forum): The Skywalker Saga (I to VI), The "Awakenings" saga and the Spin-Off trilogies.

    THE PREQUEL TRILOGY
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    1. A more focus location
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    One of the first titles I chose for the first episode was "The Republic Mistake", but then I thought it was too similar to "First Order's Fall". So I turn into "The Naboo Invasion", which looks like a smaller story compared to the others, which is exactly what I meant. The first episode takes place mainly on Naboo, with some scenes taking place in the Senate of Coruscant. They don't go to Tatooine, Anakin lives in a poor area near the Plains of Naboo where, unbeknownst to Padme, there is still slavery. This solves a lot of the problems I have with Anakin and Luke living on the same planet and also provides an interesting starting point for Anakin and Padme's relationship (she feels guilty about Anankin's condition because she is his Queen and she didn't know about the poor and rural areas on her planet).


    2. A clearer point of view

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    Another complain about the TPM is the lack of a clear POV. The more reasonable characters should be Obi Wan, however for most of the second act he's stuck on the spaceship. So the protagonist should be Qui Gon Jinn, but he don't really know enought about him to understand him and connect with him. Anankin is child withouth any kind of motive or dream, Padme seems a promiment characters but she doens't do much in the story and she dragged away by other fingendosi una handmmaiden. So I go back to my first choice: Obi Wan. Obi Wan joins Qigong and Padme to find the peace to repair the spaceship. It's Obi Wan the first to notice Anankin ability, which to entertain a bunch of kid doing some trucchi da giocoliere. During this time Padme and Obi Wan will start to show interest into each other.

    3. A not creepy Romance
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    The most outrageous thing of the Prequel is the love story between Padme and Anakin (I will address the subject more in Episode II). I think the problems start from the beginning. Natalie Portman was 18 while filming TPH (Padme should be 14) while Jake Lyod was 11 (Anakin should be 9). I think it's clear from the gecko that these two people shouldn't enter into a sexual relationship. So to fix this I set the first episode 5 years later and I closed their ages: Padme 18 and Anakin 15. Hayden Christensen would play Anakin from the start (nothing against Jake Lyod, who got too much hate, but I don't think the Anakin character functions as a child)

    4. Better Villains
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    One of my biggest concerns about TPM are the villains, not Palpatine or Darth Maul, but the Neimodians. Their motives are confused and we're not really sure what their goals are. On at least 2 occasions they express remorse for accepting Palpatine's plan and appear as incompetent and easily frightened villains, even their army is made up of ridiculous droids that the Jedi can cut into pieces like butter. Never for a moment do I think that the Viceroy's plans can be successful, they do not inspire any kind of fear or respect. If you want to grab your audience's attention, the villains don't just have to be evil or greedy, they have to be a threat to your heroes, if they become a joke in the first 2 minutes we just don't care. Of course it doesn't help that the main focus of the film is a trade taxation, which (believe it or not) I don't think is a good argument for a scifi film. However, I would keep a political theme, so I tweak the story a bit. The Trade Federation becomes the Tecno Union and the reason they start the blockade is because the Senate passes a law that prohibits the use of droids as security guards or military forces (after a hacking attack who cause the death of a Senator). So the Tecno Union, which does not represent any planet but is an industrial corporation, blocks Naboo (the first planet to apply the law and sever the contract with the Tecno Union) to attract the attention of the Senate and oppose the decision taken by the government that would in fact cease all the profits of the Tecno Union.


    5. The Ever-present Menace

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    Another thing I don't like is Palpatine as the main villain of the prequel. I don't understand why so many people like him (love to hate him). I don't find him very interesting as a character, and there's nothing wrong with Ian McDiarmid's performance, he's very menacing and scheming in both "roles" he played (he and Ewan McGregor are by far the best part of the prequel). But Palpatine's plan is far too complicated and hard to follow: he essentially makes a deal with the Trade Federation to have the Droid army, after he makes a deal with the Kaminoans to create the Clone Army and then start a war playing a key role in both sides as a big evil child you play with his toy soldiers ... it's amazing that everything works out of him and he manages to become the Emperor. So I decided to replace Palpatine with Dooku and make him the main villain of the Prequel (he will still be killed at the beginning of the third movie creating an interesting twist). In my version, Dooku is not really a Sith lord, but some kind of renegade Jedi, who left the Council after discovering the corruption of the Senate. From that moment he has held an institutional role as Count and representative of the planet of Serenno and is the first to support the blockade in the Senate by making a public speech at the end of the first episode (in which, however, he plays a marginal role by remaining in the shadows).

    6. A younger Palpatine
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    Although the role of Sidious is taken by Dooku, that of Palpatine is still present in the first film (and the other as well). In my version, however, Palatine is 15 years younger and in the film he becomes the youngest Chancellor of the Republic at 47 with the support of the more progressive part of the Senate. He is a charismatic and idealistic politician (on the surface), but it is also evident from some scenes his duplicity, he is actually more interest in power and fame (from the second film it will be more evident that he use the war to increasingly centralize the power in his hands by making questionable decisions by exploiting the state of danger).

    7. The White Tiger
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    I made Darth Maul more similar to Dathomir Nightsisters, because in my version he is the older brother of Asajj Ventress, I also rename him Lord Beiru, the White Tiger (real name is Baodur Ventress). He also plays a major role in the storyline, leading the droid army and then tracking down the Jedi in the Plains of Naboo (there's a particular scene I borrowed from Terminator II). He is Dooku's apprentice and wants to kill Qigong Voss to prove to his master that he is better, even though Dooku specifically orders him not to kill the Jedi but only to stop them from leaving the planet. Finally, the black and white colors on his face represent his origin: in the first chapter of Kenobi's Legacy it will be discovered that while Obi Wan is born a criminal and becomes a Jedi thanks to Qigong, Boadur is born a hero but becomes a killer because of Dooku.

    8. The Native American Jedi[​IMG]
    This is more of a niche thing, but I think that Star Wars is a little too "white". I think that a more diverse cast will be help to show a more realistic Galaxy. Qui Gon Jinn is a great characters, and Liam Neeson did a good job potraying him, but... I decide to opt for a different choice and change his name in Qigong Voss (inspired by the character of Quinlan Vos), he's the son of a Kiffar (he has the retrocognition—perceiving others' memories when touching objects they had contacted) and Miraluka (he's blind and instead relied on Force sight to see the physical world). The character borders on the characteristics of the Gray Jedi and also start a brief relationship with Anakin's mother (he is the only one who believes her story of the "immaculate conception" as he has a flaskback about her past).

    9. The Stupidest Scene
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    This is also part of some of the nitpick that I have with this film. The fact that Anakin manages to destroy the droid's mothership could compete for the stupidest scene contest in Star Wars. I know that Anakin is a good pilot and he's show that in the Pod's Race ... But it's just too stupid. I can accept that Luke (an untrained spacepilot) could destroy the Death Star at his first try, but Anakin? A 11year old kid, who doesn't know what he's doing or where he is? Come on, they don't rhyme so well. I already (kinda) fix this problem making Anakin older, but I made a step further: Aayla Secura (she will have a major role in later films) will pilot the ship while Anakin will maneuver the weapons. In my opinion this will make the scene a little more believable.

    10. Jar Jar Dumb
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    How to fix the dumbest character in Star Wars that everybody hate? Make him like one of the dumbest character in Hollywood that everybody seems to like. So this is going to be a pretty weird turn ... I take this idea from a scene from Ace Ventura II. Jar Jar is pretty much the same character (he also, like any Gungan, has a particular bond with aquatic animals: the ship they use to reach Naboo City is actually a large aquatic Manta ray that Gungans can telepathically communicate with) but the reason why he is exiled from his people is different, not because of his clumsiness but because he "slept" with a princess Bardottan (Julia) betrothed to her older brother. A marriage that would have united the Gungan families (who control the lake bottom) with the Bardottans (who control the plains on the surface). In the finale, Jar Jar agrees to marry Julia to unite the two armies and fight the droids. His story is completely different even if the character remains an "idiot". All the antics of him are more acceptable because at the end of the story he has a purpose and takes responsibility for the mistakes of the past.

    11. Watto of Naboo
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    This is quite unique because I tend to change human characters to aliens and not the other way around.Some people would find it blasphemous, offensive, or somehow even more racist than the original. But I want to make this change because I think Anakin needs a stepfather to give Shmi a more believable story to tell. I don't mind that Anakin was born without a father, but the way they presented it in the film is rather strange.
    They talked about like it's a perfectly normal thing, it's just insane. If you want to make Anakin like Jesus, that's fine, but even in the Bible they gave the Virgin Mary a cover-up story.I don't want to recreate the Holy Family, so I did something a little darker. Watto forced Shmi to marry him to provide for her baby, she practically bought her because her family disowned her after Shmi got pregnant and she can't tell who her father was, which suggests a reprehensible behavior. So technically she is still a slave and her conditions are even worse, because it is clear that they are having an abusive relationship even if Shmi keeps everything secret from Anakin, because Watto is kind of a good stepfather (he teaches Anankin to be a mechanic and it seems that he really cares about him).


    1. A better love story?
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    This is probably the biggest change I've made in the prequels, and it's not from an original idea. There are some videos on Youtube that suggest that in "Revenge of the Sith" one of the reasons Anankin turns evil is jealousy of Obi Wan, and there are some clues that suggest it was George Lucas' initial idea before deciding to focus on the "premonitions of death" and the saving of Padme's life (which in retrospect makes little sense). So it seemed interesting to me to go back to borrow this idea: at first I just wanted to keep the obsession of a jealous man, but I realized that it would not be enough and so I gave up on the idea of the love triangle, even if I tried not to fall into onboxious tropes. Padme and Obi Wan are together at the beginning of the film. The Jedi rule of "no relationship" only applies to Council members. But Obi Wan still wants to keep the relationship secret so as not to hurt Anankin's feelings (while Padme disapproves because she begins to feel uncomfortable about Anakin's attentions). During the film they split up, Obi Wan investigates the escalating political bombings with Aayla Secura while Padne and Anakin go to Arkanis, where Shmi Skywalwer moved after the events of the first film. At the end of the film Padme decides to marry Anakin after falling in love with him during their mission. Obviously this is not the end of the story.

    2. No Sifo-Dious
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    There is no Sifo Dias in my version. Instead it is Qigong Voss who commissioned the Clone army from the Kaminoans because he had a vision of a war that would destroy and lead to the fall of the republic. However, he was forced to abandon the project because the council did not approve the militarization of the Order. We also learn that Dooku started the war as he was the only one who believed the Qigong prophecy and uses it as an excuse to show that the war was necessary to bring to light the corruption of the Republic and the blindness of the Jedi order ("I cast shadows to show the weakness of the light" he will tell Obi Wan). Indeed, Dooku is right, his goal is to discover the real Sith lord, he believes is a member of the government, but he doesn't know how to figure it out who he is.

    3. Windu for War!
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    Even Mace Windu is not the same character, in my version he has a particular role since he is the representative of the Council during the sections of the Senate, so he is more concise in political situations than in spiritual ones. He also has a friendly relationship with Palpatine and when the chancellor decides to use the clone army to start the war with the Separatists it is Mace Windu who convinces the other members of the council to participate in the war by ceasing to be defenders of the peace and becoming fighters. for freedom. It is also Mace Windu who convinces Queen Julia of Naboo to propose to the Senate to give emergency power to Chancellor Palpatine, because he wants the war and to defeat Dooku (a former friend of him whom he now considers a traitor to the Republic).

    4. Another family
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    There are many deleted scenes in episode 2 of Padme with her parents, and while they are vaguely interesting they are also completely pointless in the continuation of the story. So I decided to reuse them giving us a clearer purpose. Padme and Anannkin don't have dinner with Padme's family, but with Anankin's, giving way to get to know Owen and Beru better, as well as the relationship between Shmi and her new husband. Anankin's mother is alive until the two young "couples" decide to have a picnic at the falls. This is to put a little more emphasis on Shmi's death as I have always found it to be an unusual and unfortunate coincidence that Shmi was kidnapped while Anankin knew nothing about it (I know the kidnapping was "arranged", ana Anakin had visions about Shmi's death, but it took one strange succession of coincidences for Anankin to know the all story).

    5. A more personal duel
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    Yoda doesn't fight Dooku and doesn't even use a lightsaber against Palpatine. But why choose Aayla? Well ... in Legends Aayla is Quinlan Voss' padawan and also a "lover", a kind of. In my version she is not his padawan (her master is Shared Hett) but she was his mistress. So in this scenario she is not a teacher against an apprentice (also because Dooku is not Yoda's apprentice) but a Qigong teacher against his ex-lover. It is Aayla and not Anakin who uses two lightsabers (er own and the Obi Wan's one, which was the Qigong one). Although Dooku (who uses a beskar rapier not a lightsaber) is impressed by Aayla's abilities he manages to overwhelm her and feels sorry for her because she lets emotions control her instead of keep them in check (again Dooku is not a Sith in my version).

    6. The Jedi Process
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    If you don't know who Prossets Dibbs is I don't blame you. But I wanted to add a scene from a Jedi trial, where the council decides to expel Dibbs from the Order because he killed an enemy in an attempt to resolve a diplomatic dispute. This serves as a clue to the hypocrisy of the Order as in the Third Act each Jedi will kill someone during the Battle of Geonosis. It also shows that a Jedi can be expelled or abandon the Order (Dibbs gladly agrees to leave the Order by denouncing their inconsistency).

    7. No platform level
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    On Geonosis the factory is not automated, but the droids are built by Twi'lek slaves, shedding new light on why the Federation wants to abolish the law banning the use of droids in military forces (abolition, slavery, federation are not terms that I have chosen at random). Furthermore, this soryline, in addition to eliminating the platform video game from the film, serves to give more space to the character of Aayla Secura and what is at stake (in addition to the death of clones and droids, which I didn't really care about).

    8. The youngest padawan
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    I think Ahsoka Tano deserves to be in the film, but being Anankin's apprentice it doesn't match the rest of the trilogy. (In fact I believe that in Revenge of the Sith Anankin can be on the Council but is not recognized the title of Master? So how could he have a padawan? Is it because Ahsoka never technically became a Jedi? And so Anankin never complete the path to get the title?)
    Fortunately, she doesn't have to be Anankin's apprentice as there is a master more suitable for her: Aayla Secura. I made Aayla Secura a more important character in the prequels, because I think a four-legged table is more stable than one with 3, this goes for all the films in the trilogies: Anakin, Obi Wan, Padme and Aayla for the PT, Luke , Han, Leia and Chewbacca for the OT and Rey, Finn, Poe and Rose for the ST .

    9. Mel Brooks' Approach
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    This might sound like a bold claim, but I don't like anything about C3-P0. I always find it annoying, not very funny and useless. And I don't understand what the purpose of Anankin's creation of him is, I don't think he adds anything to the story that makes me dislike the character even more. If someone did a survey on which character you hate the most? My default answer would be C3-PO, because it is in every fraking movie! So I made him a female ... this alone it doesn't change much. I made her Padme's handmaid when she became a senator and she is very protective of her. She will later become Leia's nursemaid during her youth. She will maintain an "odd couple" relationship with R2-D2 of love / hate.

    10. Tusken into Tusked
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    I replaced the Tusken Raiders with Togorians, this is mostly to start the character of Rexxar Valiance in the spin-off trilogy "Family Affairs", but it's also because Shmi doesn't live on Tatooine.


    1. A more human character
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    I kept the premonitions, but making the only reason Anankin switched to the dark side seems too weak and poor to me, Anakin decides based on something that has yet to happen (in the original prequel Anankin's premonitions are supported by the fact that the premonitions of his mother turned out to be true, however in my version Anankin has no premonitions of Shmi's death). I don't really like the idea of premonition because they often lead to the idea of self-fulfilling prophecy, which underestimates the value of premonition in the first place (if you know something is going to happen it is more likely to happen). So I'm looking for another approach. Anakin discovers the relationship between Padme and Obi Wan. This has completely destroyed his certainties, completely changes not only his feelings towards Obi Wan but true of the Jedi Order in general. It's a big change, but it seems like a more valid reason to completely change a character of that date in the original film, Anankin in this way doesn't look like a complete psychopath but rather his decision to follow the Dark side makes perfect sense as people who he loved most lied and betrayed him. I understand that in this way to make Anankin more plausible I am forced to make Padme and Obi Wan more sinful, but it seems to me that it is a fair exchange, in this way they are not 2 saints against the devil but their personal conflict proves that no one is really guilty and everyone is responsible.

    2. The Jedi Terminator
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    One of the biggest crimes of the prequels was turning a ruthless assassin robot from 2005 cartoons into a coughing robot only capable of escaping. The third episode opens with the same scene in which Grievous is introduced and with the deaths of various Jedi including Shaak Ti. Barely escaped Kirak Katarn along with other Jedi will decide to leave the Order fearing that the war will lead to the extinction of the Jedi and all their legacy. A move seen by Mace Windu as cowardice but accepted by Yoda, Ahsoka also abandons the order along with Shared Hett to Aayla Secura's disappointment.

    3. Leia's Name
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    In my version, Organa and Skywalker share multiple scenes together and become friends. Padme and Raja (breha in the original) are both pregnant and together discuss the name to give to the balmbino. If it's a female Padme would like to call her Leia while if she's a male Anakin would like to call him Ben (but Padme disagrees). Raja Organa (queen of Alderaan) has a difficult birth and risks dying, Bail will decide to save his wife instead of the child. This event will initiate Anakin's semi-premonitory nightmares. At the end of the film, Raja decides to raise Padme's baby by calling her Leia in honor of her friend.

    4. Luke's Name
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    Luke's name instead chooses Obi Wan (more or less). When Anakin asks him what he would call his son after Padme refuses to call him Ben, Obi Wan replies that he would have a baby who will call him Lucas. Padme suggests that Luke sounds better.
    I've always found the choice of names slightly ridiculous in episode 3, it seems like one of the many things Lucas added at the last minute (like Obi Wan picking up Anankin's sword on Mustafar otherwise he couldn't give it to Luke). I find it strange that Padme about her after a difficult birth and after her husband tries to kill her finds the clarity of mind to name her children. I wanted to add some scenes to make the choice a little more believable, even though Padme always chooses both names.

    5. Aayla's fate
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    As mentioned earlier Aayla plays a bigger role in my version. During the second episode it is suggested that after Qigong Voss died, Aayla began to develop feelings towards Obi Wna in hopes of being able to overcome her loss. In Episode III she is made even more explicit when her master and her padawan also abandon her. However Obi Wan doesn't feel ready for a new relationship yet (he still thinks of Padme) and the two share only one kiss before Aayla is killed by Grievous on Utapau. Aayla's death also serves to make greater sense for the defeat of the Jedi (in the original film a lot of Jedi die during order 66 but they are all characters we know practically nothing)

    6. An old friend
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    Yoda does not go to Kaskyyk to meet Chewbacca, but to Ilum to meet Qigong Voss.
    One thing I forgot to mention is that Qigong is the one who had the prophecy of the Chosen One, predicted that a parentless Jedi would restore balance to the galaxy and defeat the Sith forever, After the execution of Order 66, Qigong revealed to Yoda: "this is not the end, a new period of darkness will begin, but do not despair my friend, a light will arise that will forever change the fate of the Galaxy".

    7. Red vs Blue
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    Darth Vader uses Palpatine's sword to kill Mace Windu and will use the same sword for the rest of the film (this is due to a substantial change I made to the color of the lightsabers which I won't explain here). While Obi Wan will use Anankin's lightsaber to defeat him on Mustafar as he lost his on Utapau during the fight with General Grievous.

    8. Anakin, the Unburnt
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    After being defeated, Anakin asks Obi Wan to help him, but Obi Wan refuses to do so saying that once he has taken the path to the dark side he cannot go back. Disappointed by his failure as a teacher and friend, he leaves Anakin's body to die on Mustafar. Anakin is not burned by the lava, he only loses his legs, he will lose other pieces of himself in the following years (in Kenobi's Legaccy and Family Affairs). I never particularly liked the idea of Vader staying in the same suit for about 20 years. It seems too drastic a change to me to think that Ananin goes from being a Jedi to being a full-Darth Vader in a single day.


    9. Familiar Faces

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    In episode III a subplot was cut that talked about the birth of the rebellion, however in my opinion it would have worked better if the members who were part of it are characters that we would find in the following films, while only Mon Mothma is recognizable instead of a group of humans (for a galaxy with thousands of planets there are so many humans) In my version all members will return in later films.


    I created this thread to expose my ideas in hopes of finding someone to discuss creatively with. None of the changes are final or indisputable, as I am still working and writing. There are many things I still don't know how to solve and others I'm not sure about. I am open to suggestions, criticisms, feedback and new ideas. I want to create a story with more realistic and engaging characters like in the Kotor games, or like other science fiction properties (like Firefly or Battlestar Galactica) that are aimed at a more adult audience (not that there is anything wrong with "kids" movies. , they are often much more meaningful than many other films, but they don't reflect the way I write and I don't want to feel constrained to respect the "age rating" rules).
    I didn't realize that I could no longer edit the post once it is completed, next week I will post Episodes IV to VI as a reply to this thread.​
     
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  2. Dryden Valiance

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    THE ORIGINAL TRILOGY
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    1. A friendly call back
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    One of the first changes I make in Episode IV is about Biggs Darklighter. I think one of the more interesting cutscene in the film is about Luke hanging out with his friends on Tatooine. I admit I reintegrated those scenes into a Kubrick parody, basically I had the idea of turning the rotating escape pod with C-3PO and R2-D2 into an empty beer can that Biggs throws at Luke to "wake him up" from his frustration at not being able to join the Empire Fleet as he is about to do.
    Luke's complaints about being forced to stay on the farm are expressed here (not to his uncles). It divert a little from the original narrative structure, however there is a big difference between Lucas's version and my version: my episode 4 is the actual episode 4, so Luke's intro parallels the introduction of Leia because the audience already knows they are brother and sister, and while Leia is very interested in politics and tries to continue what Padme and her parents start with the Rebellion, Luke instead does not care much about politics, he just wants to be a pilot and leave a desert planet and a meaningless life, he is very willing to join the Emprie as Biggs does if that can get him out of Tatooine. Also, there is no hint that Biggs is about to join the Rebellion, in fact in my version he doesn't.


    2. The warrior mode

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    As I said in the prequel, I hate C3PO, I know a lot of people like it as the "*****" character, but he's just so annoying to me, I don't find him funny at all (and it's just a personal prefeence). I think that in Lucas' mind a "living" translator, who knows seven million forms of communication, was the most useful tool in a Galaxy with hundreds of different races, but he is not. And his existence also raises an interesting question, because: what is the most logical thing to do in a Galaxy with hundreds or even millions of different languages? Transporting a rusty, perishable robot that can speak all that language (and has no other usable utilities) or have at least one common language that everyone can learn and use?
    I mean, there are no rules in this world, but English is our "planetary" language. I think protocol droids were a good guess in the 80s, but today with the internet, google translator and every other small portable device the idea of a character whose sole purpose is to translate has become a bit useless, at least for mine generation (or for my taste). I mean, there are no rules in this world, but English is our "planetary" language. I think protocol droids were a good guess in the 80s, but today with the internet, google translator and every other small portable device the idea of a character whose sole purpose is to translate has become a bit useless, at least for mine generation (or for my taste, I'm trying to figuring out why I hate that character so much I usually don't mind comic relief, but everytime I see C-3PO I start to wonder: why are you in this movie? What is your purpose? R2-D2 is doing all the work and somehow they share the credit? Why? Maybe I feel sorry for how he treat R2-D2, I dunno).
    There's also the stupid rule that he has to be in every Star Wars movie ever (with the exception of Solo, I think) because Lucas came up with the idea that the story was being told by him and R2-D2, which it's a nice idea, but then they erased his memory in Episode III, and then they did the same thing in Episode IX (or no, I don't remember).
    Moral of the story my version of C-3PO is very different, not only is she a female but also has a personality change between the prequels and the original trilogy, because in "A trap for Vader" Rexxar Valiance activates her warrior mode which was disabled (after the Clones War the Empire forbidden the usage of armed droids, although there are some exceptions: Grakkus in "Solo's Betrayal" has weaaponized droids, but on Nar Shadaa the Empire laws don't really apply).
    In the second trilogy B3-T13 (another modification I made is to change all the droid names to "real" names, similar to C1-10P> Chopper in Rebels, C-3PO became B3-T13 and R2- D2 has become K1-T5> Kit, a reference to the "Knight Rider" series) is the only droid capable of using weapons, is a more proactive character, Leia instructs them to defend K1-T5 and their love / hate relationship has its basis on them being at odds with each other but being forced to be together for the sake of the mission (K1-T5 brings vital information but is a bit reckless and B3-T13 tries to be protective even if she is annoyed by K1-T5's behavior).
    I also want to throw in something a little crazier, inspired nonetheless by SOLO... B3T13 starts getting a crush/attachment on Luke (who is not very far from the original C-3PO) and in the second film tries to boycott the approach between Han and Leia because she thinks Leia would be better off with Luke, and it gets a little creepy because it seems she almost wants to use Leia as a surrogate to live out her fantasies with Luke, however this is due to the fact that in some way her wiped memory has return because she know that Leia and Luke should be together, but as siblings not as lover. So B3-T13 is still a very weird character and got even weirder in Episode IX.


    3. The Family Dinner
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    There is no way to convince me that Leia was always supposed to be Darth Vader's daughter in Episode IV, as many should already know it was an addition that Lucas made in later films.
    But I want to tell the saga in chronological order, so I have to address this issue. I already talked about it in "A Trap for Vader", as the main theme of the story is to kill Darth Vader to protect Leia's identity, and the story ends with an unsatisfactory and uncertain answer: Vader still has doubts about the true origin of Leia while she learns that the Organas are not her biological parents (but decides to act as they are).
    The whole point of my version of Episode IV is to show the repercussions of Obi Wan's decision at the end of Episode III, so it's mostly about Luke and Leia (in the same way my version of the Sequel is about the repercussions of Luke and Leia decision at the end of Episode VI, is a cycle of difficult decisions and their impact on history that repeats itself up to Episode IX).
    To talk about Leia's identity, I referred to another famous scene from another Lucas film. Leia and Vader have dinner together on the Death Star, which sounds crazy, but it is clear that Vader still has doubts because Leia reminds him of Padme so he wants to talk to her, he gave her a dress very similar to the one Padme had where he married her (the white dress that Leia will have during her rescue). Leia uses dinner to try to figure out Emprie's future plans, so there is a subtle conservation between the two with very different intentions. And if you wonder why I need to steal a scene for another movie Pirates of the Caribbean have already stolen that scene in The Curse of the Black Pearl, I think the archetype of the "prisoner bride" (because what she essentially is) had an old tradition going back from Bluebeard's folktale.


    4. No one can escape death
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    I don't like Obi Wan and Darth Vader fighting in a new hope, compared to what they did in Revenge of the Sith it's a little too lame and disappointing. There is a better version of YouTube that you may be looking for on your own, which I think is a big improvement. But not because it is faster and more flashy, but because it shows the clear threat of Darth Vader. In the original version we don't really understand why Obi Wan gave up, he's not hurt, he's not exhausted, it just seems like he prefers to die and become a ghost, which is also a big problem I have with episode V: if Jedi can become more powerful and "live" as a ghost after death ... that undermines the importance of Death, when I was a child I always assume that when Obi Wan died somehow he transfer his power and consciousness into Luke, so he became more powerful by using (in some sense) a younger body, which is the reason I assumed why Luke could still hear his voice, I don't want to talk about comics but in a similar way to the Dc Characters's Firestorm, with Martin Stein "living" in the body of Ronald Raymond and they being more powerful together.
    However, this was not the case, and overall I don't think it is a good idea either. But I still think that Obi Wan's presence in Episode V overshadows the importance of his death in Episode IV, so Obi Wan didn't appear in my version of Episode V (he appears at the end of Episode VI as the only Jedi ghost, no Yoda, no Anakin, death is death ... at least for most people). The conversation Obi Wan had with Luke about Anakin and Darth Vader's past is in Episode IV (kinda).


    5. Those fracking dice!

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    Oh ... the dice, the Han's infamous dice. It's quite possible that I started this whole project to make damn sense of Han's dice, I was so pissed off about what they did in the Last Jedi and SOLO that I decided to make them very important plotwise even if they are no logical reasons why they should be. Han's introduction and character are very different from the original film, he has a more Indiana Jones or even James Bond vibe, it becomes more evident in his relationship with women, which he often mistreats, he is a womanizer even if he hides a romantic side. In a way, I take inspiration from Jack Sparrow, which is funny because it's pretty clear that Jack Sparrow takes inspiration from Han Solo.
    The first time we see him he is in bed with the Tonnika twins who then try to tie him up to deliver him to Jabba and collect the bounty. I got rid of the "Han shot first" scene with Greedo, because at this point it became a meme. The interaction with Greedo is very different and also shows Han's dark side with the introduction of his signature dice: he says he uses to make decisions similar to Two-Face's with his coin (yes ... I mentioned again a comic), but from Greedo's words we learn that they are cheating dice, which Han uses to win in the Sabacc games, at which point Han shoots Greedo unarmed (this is vaguely inspired by Cassian Andor's killing of the informant in Rogue One).
    Han is not a hero, he is a ruthless criminal, he is only interested in preserving his life by any means necessary, he doesn't care about anything and anyone else (except Chewie and the Falcon)..
    This is just the premise, but the most important dice scene comes next: when Han, Chewie, Obi Wan and Luke discover that Alderaan has been destroyed they land on an asteroid to decide what to do next, Luke and Obi Wan want to go and rescue the princess. (B3-T13 tells them she was captured by Darth Vader and is probably on the Death Star) while Han wants to leave them on the nearest planet because he doesn't want anything to do with the Empire, so as usual he decides to roll the dice (knowing they are rigged) but Obi Wan uses the Force to alter the result. This is clearly inspired by the exact same scene in "The Phantom Menace" which is probably one of my favorite scenes from the film, however in TPM it was underused and in the end it doesn't make much sense, I like the fact that Qui Gon cheats but bargains on the life of two human beings, which doesn't seem like a Jedi thing. While I think the same scene suits the characters of Han Solo and Kenobi better and it also more engaging, because we know that Han tried to cheat, Han knows that Obi Wan must have used some Jedi tricks to change the outcome, but no one can say anything because otherwise the whole purpose of the roll of the dice would be pointless.
    This change actually has pretty much nothing to do with the origin of Han's dice, but it solves an issue I have with Episode IV: I don't like the characters being literally "sucked" into the story, it seemed to me. too convenient and dull, I wish they had first argued whether it was worth risking their life to save the princess or not.


    6. Dark Lighter (part 1)
    [​IMG] I talked about it before, but Biggs Darklighter does not join the Rebellion, he remains an Imperial pilot, not only that but he will be the one to chase Luke during the Trench Run, he will also communicate with him trying to convince him to surrend and asking him why he is fighting the Empire while the last time they met he wanted to join ithem. This confrontation serves as a pivotal point for Luke's character, because he understands that his dreams and desire were futile and childish, it is not important what he wants to do but what is right to do.

    7. Dark Lighter (part 2)

    [​IMG] For this reason it is not Han Solo who "saves" Luke, but it is Luke himself, who makes the decision to kill his old friend to save billions of people (a decision that will haunt him for the rest of the trilogy). There are two main reasons why I made these changes.
    First: it serves to set Luke's journey in Episode V, because after the destruction of the Death Star he becomes a sort of hero among the Rebels, he even begins to be called "The Starkiller" but all the praise he receives does not help him get rid of the sorrow he felt for Biggs' death, that's why he has a vision / dream of Obi Wan telling him to go to Dagobah and look for Yoda, to satisfy the anxiety and fear of becoming a monster, a killer.
    Second: to give Han Solo a proper and more believable story arc. Han Solo goes from cynical criminal to becoming a compassionate hero in a matter of days, risking his life and his beloved spaceship to save the life of someone he has known for less than a week.
    I can't believe that, and it's even weirder when at the beginning of Empires Strikes Back he still hasn't paid off his debt to Jabba. His story arc doesn't make sense, and I know the focus should be on Luke's story, but you can have multiple protagonists in a movie with different stories interacting with each other (Han's story diverges from Luke's in the next films anyway).
    I think if Han had left the Rebellion at the end of ANH for real, it would create the ability to explore his character in a deeper way and give him more time and space to grow and redeem himself. The whole trilogy is about redemption, not just the redemption of Darth Vader, but also of Luke and Leia: Luke was a farmer who had no interest in the political landscape of the Galaxy and learned that he has a responsibility to do something. Leia, from the other hand, takes a lot of responsibility for the political situation by neglecting his personal desire and learning to love. Finally Han learns to take care of someone else besides himself and to be more of a team player than a loner.

    7. No medal for Chewie, or Han... or Luke
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    The ending of ANH is a bit strange in relation to the other films. I don't blame the Alliance for taking a break to celebrate their first victory, but the war is far from over. All the ceremonial seems a little too optimistic and premature to me, I have the same problem with the ceremony at the end of "The Phantom Menace". Lucas treats both films as stand-alone films, but they aren't. They are the first chapter of a trilogy, they should be treated as an "introduction", so a celebration at the end of them is a bit unnecessary and confusing.
    I think the ending of ANH should be a little bit more bittersweet.
    These are 2 examples of other films that are the first film in a trilogy even if this was not the initial intention: Terminator and Jurassic Park. Both of these films could have remained as singular films and worked perfectly, but they leave room for sequels, perhaps even unintentionally. At the end of Jurassic Park there is a scene with Hammond looking at the first amber mosquito he has found, he regrets that his dream has become a nightmare so there is a possibility that from this experience he will try to reddem his mistakes (although that will lead to another disaster).
    Terminator instead ends with a plausible question: who will be John Connor's father? Which doen't sound like a big deal, but if Kyle Reese survives the movie there's hardly any reason to make a sequel, Terminator 2's premise is all about the Terminator being John's father figure to realize that maybe he doesn't need one (the fail of the other sequels lies in the fact that the reason for their existence is not as interesting: noone cares about John 'wife because she was never a characters in the previous movies, and the other ones have virtually nothing to do with the first two movies so why should be part of the franchise?).
    Both Jurassic Park and Terminator function as the first chapter of a trilogy because they have left some questions open, some suspended threads.
    The celebration at the end of Episode IV feels definitive, which is why most people remember this scene more than the celebrations at the end of Episode VI (another reason why is: this doesn't have Ewoks).
    I know technically Darth Vader and the Emperor are still alive, but we can predict that if the Rebellions destroy their most menacing weapon, they will eventually defeat them (maybe). In my version, however, there are many plots that remain open, even Luke begins to question the moral decision he has made to destroy the Death Star.
    The film ends with Luke and Leia hugging and kissing, which on a superficial level seems like a perfect ending: the hero saves the Galaxy and takes the princess, but he hasn't faced Darth Vader or the Emperor and the princess is actually her sister, so there are many steps he has to take to complete his journey.

    1. A trap for... Luke
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    So ... Episode V is all about bounty hunters ... well, not really. Wampa's attack at the beginning of the film is instead about Luke falling into a Durge trap, Durge wants to hand him over to the Empire as Darth Vader put a large bounty on him. There are some scenes where it is evident that Vader is sure that only a mighty Jedi could destroy the Death Star. Durge will hunt Luke down to Dagobah. (I like all SW's monsters and creatures but I don't think Wampa's attack is very necessary for the story, maybe it's an excuse to explain Mark Hamill's facial surgery, but I'm not sure how many people notice it). Also it seemed strange to me that all Bounty hunters follow the Millennium Falcon and no one follows Luke on Dagobah and finally I want a "sparring" villaint for Luke to practice with before he goes to face Vader, to show his lightsaber training (I should have mentioned earlier that in my version Obi Wan trained Luke in the Force and in Lightsaber combat during his youth.).

    2. Snake as Dengar
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    Boba Fett isn't Han Solo's main antagonist, Dengar is. And the scene with Jabba in a New Hope is actually in the first act of Episode V. Han returns to Tatooine to pay his debt but Jabba wants more, Boba Fett (commissioned by Darth Vader himself) sets out to pay the debt. of Han exchanging information on the rebel base, Han tells them he does not know where the rebels are, but if Jabba can give him three days, he will report the information they want. Jabba agrees, much to Dengar's chagrin that he wants to kill Han and Bossk who want to sell Chewie as a slave.
    After Han leaves, Jabba orders all the bounty hunters to follow him and kill Han as soon as he leads them to the Rebel Base. So Dengar, Boba Fett, Bossk and Zuckuss follow the Falcon to Hoth. I made this change to reference another scene in "A Trap for Vader" when Boba Fett and Darth Vader make a deal, if you've read the fourth issue of the comic "Target: Vader" you can guess how things play out.


    3. The Bounty Hunters Hunt
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    There is no Exogorth, although the scene is fun and surprising (and I really hate cutting another monster) it doesn't serve any purpose. I think a bounty hunter hunt is much more interesting, and I use it to show Han Solo's qualities and quick thinking, but also Leia's cunning and combat prowess. Together they defeat all of the bounty hunters who have pursued them, except Boba Fett who does not participate in the thrilling chase.
    There aren't many other changes with Han and Leia's storyline, Lando's betrayal is more or less the same, but it's Boba Fett who shows up when the door opens, not Darth Vader. Boba Fett basically waits for Han at the "finish line", knowing that if things go badly with the other Bounty Hunters Han will go to Lando.
    Vader arrives later and begins interrogating Han to find out Luke's location, at this point he is pretty sure that Luke and Leia are his children, which is why he is reluctant to torture Leia.
    During interrogation Han proves that he is no longer willing to betray Luke, not because he cares about him, but because he wants to be a better person for Leia: a man of honor who deserves her affection rather than a selfish scoundrel (his words also convince Lando to save Leia and Chewbacca).


    4. Obi Wan's Legacy
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    This is probably the change most people will hate. But Yoda isn't alone on Dagobah, there are several Jedi and Padawans hiding from the Empire. Including K'Krunk, Oppo Rancisis, Asajj Ventress and Jade Kenobi ... yes ... there will be a major change in the Kenobi's Legacy spin-off ... Ventress and Kenobi will have a daughter together, but if that's not crazy enough I want to remind you that in my version Asajj Ventress is also the younger sister of Darth Maul (Bao Ventress). In the first Kenoby's Legacy film she tries to kill him, in the second film they are forced to work together during the Mandalorian Rebellion and in the third film they fall in love. The legacy of the title includes the guilt over Maul's death, the creation of Darth Vader, the betrayal of Shared Hett (Dark Krayt in Episode XI, returns to seek revenge on Obi Wan) and finally being an absent father for his daughter, Kenoby doesn't really leave a nice "Legacy".
    I wanted to reuse Mara Jade's storyline somehow, because she was a killer tasked with killing Luke and then she married him, however Mara Jade didn't fit into the sequel's storyline so I replaced her with Ventress which has a more interesting name (Asajj> Assassin) and design, but I have kept Jade as her daughter's name.
    This change obviously brings some problems to the Jedi mythology in Star Wars, because if there are other Jedi besides Yoda and Obi Wan, why don't they fight the Emperor or Darth Vader? But in Legends and also in Canon there are still other Jedi besides Obi Wan and Yoda, so I don't see that as a mayor's problem. In my version the Emperor does not rule because he is more powerful in the Force, he has more political power, all of Palpatine's actions in the prequels were meant to make the Jedi the villain, make them the real perpetrators of the war as if they want to prolong for their own. greed for power.
    The Jedi on Dagobah are the ones who refuse to fight at the beginning of Episode III, they are pacifists who want nothing to do with the Empire or the rest of the Galaxy, they are in exile and in a sense they are Gray Jedi who refuse to use their connection with the Force because in the end destiny is already written and any interference is futile.

    5. Creatures crawl in search of blood
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    Why did I put Vincent Price's face in a Koh cosplay? Because I'm insane.... or because after Peter Cushing and Christopher Lee I thought it was a little unfair not to add another horror movie icon to the Star Wars's roster. Or because I really like the Avatar animated series and thought the vision on Dagobah wasn't creepy enough, I want a giant spider/scorpion creatures lurking over Luke's body. Perhaps it involves some reminiscence of the Lord of the Ring? Shelob's dark cave? I don't know, but the creatures won't have Vincent Price's face, I just create the characters imagining his voice, his elegant, ominous and exquisitely evil voice.

    1. The inside man
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    I don't picture Boba Fett in a gold bikini, but the first act of RTJ is a bit clunky (and probably quite "problematic" for a modern audience). My main problem is that Luke and the others have planned three different rescues for Han that all fail but also kinda work in the end. Which it's fascinating from a certain point of view, I guess Luke wanted to try every possibility before being forced to kill Jabba: first he sends the droids, then Leia and Chewbie and then he goes by himself to try to negotiate with the Hutt (FunFact: Reviewing the scene I noticed that Bib Fortuna act as Jabba's translator, proving once again that C-3PO is a completely useless character). So how to change this convoluted plan? By adding Boba Fett as part of the "heist", he will act as the "inside" man, so to speak, similar to what Lando does in the original but with more credibility, Lando is still present during the rescue. Some people may think this change is to get rid of Boba Fett'laughable ending (which has already been retconned in The Mandalorian) others could say that it doesn't make sense for Boba to work with Luke, which is debatable: Boba Fett is a mercenary and he will do anything for the right amount of money. However the main reason is that I have to end Boba's story arc in a more meaningful way, because Boba Fett is one of the few characters featured in both the original and the prequel, and in my case he plays a major role in one of the spin-off (the multiple-mentioned "A trap for Vader"), so I thought he deserve a more satisfying ending.

    2. Teddy into Grizzly
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    I fundamentally made a single change to ROTJ (Ewok into Wookies), but it changes the whole movie after Han Solo's rescue mission.
    Many people know that ROTJ should have taken place on Kashyyyk instead of Endor. I don't completely hate Ewok design, in fact I created an Ewok as a co-star in the Old Gods trilogy (a tough, veteran archer named Weasel Wicket riding a small velociraptor). But I wish they had stayed true to the original idea, because the final showdown on Endor between the Stoormtrooper and the Teddybears is just ridiculous and unbelievable. I understand what Lucas aimed to do, he wanted to show a primitive tribe winning against an advanced futuristic army, but he could do the same with the Wookies. And I know a lot of people and kids loved the Ewoks, they made two movies about them and I'm confident into saying they're better than the "Holiday Special", but obviously everything will be better than the Holiday Special.


    3. I Am Vengeance. I Am The Night. I Am... K'Krunk!

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    Why add K'Krunk? Why give him the voice of Kevin Conroy? Why am I so intrigued by this character? I don't fully know, but he's an immortal Jedi samurai, I don't know anything about him, but I think he's cool.
    K'Krunk is a very peculiar character (that not many people know, and in fact I don't know much either) he is around during the time of the Clone Wars but also during the reign of Darth Krayt on which my XI episode is loosely based on. This gives me the opportunity to build a bridge between all four trilogies because essentially all of the characters from the first two trilogies will be dead at the start of my Episode X.
    He also has a secondary purpose in the film: to introduce Chewbacca's backstory and to be a speaker for the Wookies ... yes, a translator isn't always a bad idea, but it needs a specific purpose, in my version the Wookies are able to speak Basic (they have a Standard Galactig language, so again ... why C-3PO? I know the protocol droid can do other things besides translating, but I don't care) but they refuse to do that because its the language of the "Slavers", the language used by the Trandoshan.
    K'Krunk advises Luke to go to Kashyyyk to restore his sight to Han (she doesn't heal by herself). So we learn why Chewbacca was banished from his planet from K'Krunk's words: A hundred years earlier King MeruMeru (Chewbacca's father) was the ruler of one of the largest Wookies tribes but when his forest began to lose resources, he began a civil war with the other tribes on the planet. However since is forbidden by the law for a Wookie to kll another Wookie, the war did not result in casualties but instead in hundreds of thousands of prisoners. To resolve the overcrowding of prisons, the king began selling the prisoners as slaves to the neighboring planet of Trandosha, effectively creating a slave trade between the two planets. K'Krubk was sent by the Jedi council to the planet to figure out what was happening and tried to stop the war to no avail. Chewbacca also tried to change his father's decision to no avail, eventually he challenged the king7father in an ancient ritual fight that ended with Chewbacca slashing his father's throat with his claws. Chewie stopped the war and freed the remaining prisoners, but was later accused by his younger brother of being a Madclaw and thus was exiled from the planet. This story was stolen directly from Zaalbar and Chundar plot in Kotor which I have always found fascinating, there are also some references to the characters of Iorek Byrnison from “His Dark Materials”.


    4. DIY your own Jedi

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    No second Death Star. I never understood the idea of building another even bigger Death Star , I admit it looks prettier than the first one, but it also looks weaker. I mean, it makes the Empre seem weaker, and if you start thinking about the Emperor's "trap" it doesn't make any sense. He purposely decided to leak the location of the Death Star to lure the remaining Rebels into a trap ... but the Rebellion is successful, they disable the shields and destroy the II Death Star with him inside. So basically he is doomed himself, the Emperor is responsible for his own defeat. How should he be the mastermind behind the events of the entire trilogy? What? His plans are always the worst I can think of and somehow most of the time they succeed? I don't really like the character of the Emperor in the original film, he seems rushed and underdeveloped to me.
    Also I have trouble with the Emperor's plan to make Luke his new apprentice, I think he's a little short-sighted (not because he's old). Does Palpatine think he is immortal? He is a human being approaching 89 years old (according to the canon he was born 84 years before the battle of Yavin and RoTJ takes place 4 years later). I don't understand why an 88-year-old emperor would seek out a new apprentice even if as a Sith he is completely addicted to hunger for power and to maintaining it.
    So I changed a few things in the final duel borrowing, oddly, some concepts from Rise of Shywalker (but gave them more sense). Palpatine wants Luke to kill him, because he recognizes that Darth Vader is not strong enough to succeed him, he believe in the Sith code: there should be two. No more, no less. One to embody power, the other to desire it. Palpatine is well aware of the Rule of Two, he knows that an apprentice had to kill his master to become a master himself. And he was also tired of being alive, he thought Vader would kill him a long time ago and continue the Sith legacy many years before, so he provokes Luke into killing him because he legitimately wants to die, to make Luke not his apprentice but the new master.
    In case his plan fails Palpatine also has a contingency plan. In fact right on Kashyyk the Empire uses a dismantled refinery as a secret laboratory to create a Jedi-clone (a hybrid Sith/Jedi clone combines the DNA of most of the Jedi and the Sith of the past). I take this idea from an episode of The Mandalorian, probably my favorite episode. But also partially from the plot of Dark Empire series of comic book about the Palpatine clone (which also the Rise of Skywalker stole from) and in someway from the Fotce Unleash II storyline.
    However, despite all of this similarities, I would have added this change even without all these coincidences.because the true origins of this plot stem from my favorite villain in Dragoball: Cell, the perfect being.


    5. The haunted Ghost
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    I don't have a problem with Hayden Criestesen's ghost in Return of the Jedi, I have a problem with Anakin Skywalker's ghost in Return of the Jedi, and therefore with Yoda's ghost. If a Jedi can transform into a ghost without any training or learning, what's the point of being dead? I don't really like the concept of Force Ghost for everyone, I find it hard to digest. Vader just died, his body is on fire and then he appears as a ghost behind Luke? So what is the purpose of his sacrifice? He can talk to Luke and Leia whenever he wants, there is a lot less tragedy in his story if he can come back as a ghost. The problem with Yoda is very similar, he is dead after 900 years but he canstill return as a ghost? Doesn't he deserve some peace and rest? There is a parody clip on Youtube of Kylo arguing with Luke and complaining that the Jedi have to "work" even after death, which is said as a joke, but that's not far from the truth, being a ghost shouldn't be present as a "pleasant" thing.
    Obi Wan instead appears as a ghost because until Anakin's death he has some "unfinished" business to do, because he essentially creates Darth Vader and confesses to Luke that now thanks to him he can cross over to the other side. I use Force Ghosts in a more traditional way: they are not joyful spirits, they are tormented souls.


    6. A reason for the Sequels
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    The last scene of Episode VI is a discussion between Luke and Leia that serves to set up the sequel. They argue over the decision to reveal Darth Vader's true identity and their relationship with him. After a chat Leia convinced Luke to keep everything secret between the two of them (not even Han should know) because at that point everyone knows Vader as the Dark Lord of the Sith, hand of the Emperor, nothing good will come from telling the truth and even if in the end he redeemed himself, it was too late to make a difference. Leia shows a more logical and pragmatic point of view and even if he is annoyed with her, Luke decides to agree with her.
     
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    THE SEQUEL TRILOGY

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    1. A familiar face
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    I'll never understand why TFA starts with two completely unknown characters. While Max von Sydow is a good pick to play a Star Wars character, Lor San Tekka has no valid reason to be in the film. I think the film should start with a more familiar face and not some random old guy.
    So I changed the conversation in the tent to a conversation between Poe and Leia's hologram (a clear callback to ANH), during this conversation we will learn that Poe stole an encrypted message in the mainframe of the First Order base and we also start to learn that Leia cares about Poe much more than just a soldier. She trustes him more than anyone else, but she also feared he would get into trouble (as he usually does). This change serves to better show the relationship between Poe and Leia that is mentioned in the opening scroll, but is only really explored in the second film.
    In my version, Luke's position is never mentioned, neither Poe nor Leia know what the data contains, the only thing they don't know is that it must be important because the First Order is after them.
    So the conversation between Kylo Ren and Lor San Tekka doesn't happen. I think it's not only boring, but useless and a clear example of bad timing: we don't need to know that Kylo isn't what he looks like, we don't need to know that he didn't "rose" from the Dark Side. Kylo is supposed to be the villain of the movie and in his first scene the movie tells us that his family is good? It ruined the big twist in the movie! Well ... what was supposed to be the big twist of the movie.


    2. Revanchism into the First Order
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    One of the major changes I've made to the sequel involves the First Order: They think the Empire was actually good for the Galaxy. I think the filmmakers missed a real opportunity to talk about history and a common misconception about Autocracy rule or dictatorship like The Galactic Empire. The idea that since the Empire is portrayed as the Villain in the movies, then every person in the Galaxy must celebrate their own defeat at the end of Return of the Jedi cannot be true. Dictators rise up with the consent of the people, that's a big part of their power. People often don't care what the government actually does or don't know the truth, and Palpatine himself is portrayed as a manipulator of the mind and an expert at distorting facts to appear as the hero.
    In my version the First Order is not another carbon copy of the Empire, it is a group of independent systems of the Outer Rim who want to re-establish the Empire, because they felt that the New Republic (founded and financed by the Core Worlds) did not represent their needs or interests. I based it on the Unification War of the TV series Firefly, where the "Alliance" is actually seen as the villain, and we focus our attention on the losers. In this sense Kylo Ren is not an angry / emo teenager whose motives are confused and contradictory, he is actually an idealist trying to remedy the injustice created by his mother.


    3. The Red Guerrilla
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    Speaking of Kylo Ren ... I based his character on Che Guevara and renamed him Malak (although during the saga he has more similarities with Revan).
    He doesn't wear a mask (also because the reason for wearing one is pretty inconsistent in the movies) and is more like an anti-hero than a "villain" with a redeeming arc like Vader. He starts by trying to do everything possible to give a voice to those who have been excluded from the decisions of the new republic, fighting for the rights of the poorest planets (those of the Outer Rim) and he feels responsible due his mother founded the New Republic which he consider a greedy government, not open to change or to listen to everyone's opinion.
    The First Order recognizes that Palpatine was not a good emperor and did bad and bad things, but still believes the galaxy must have a strong leader who cares for everyone's interests while the Republic is full of bureaucracy, corporate interference and games of power that ended up in a clogged system that doesn't really work. If the Empire were the Nazis of the Star Wars Universe, the First Order is more like the Communist, in theory they fight for justice and equality but they use extreme methods and their classism view of the Galaxy prevents any kind of communication or compromises.


    4. The worst sin the Sequel ever commited
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    My biggest disappointment in the sequel has to be the Finn character. Disney seemed to promise us the first black protagonist in a Star Wars movie, but either they broke that promise or they couldn't keep it.
    A stormtropper defector is such an interesting concept, they could have written a very interesting and profound character but instead they turned it into a literal joke, a silly black comic relief. He is almost like Ron in the Harry Potter saga, a character who is always scared, always screams and hardly ever contributed significantly to the team or the overall story.
    Finn is, without a doubt, the most wasted potential of the new trilogy, he's the only good and fresh idea JJ had to offer ... and he didn't do absolutely nothing with it!
    My version of Finn is a very different character: there is no reconditioning. Finn really thinks the First Order is good, as are everyone in it. His decision to desert has nothing to do with "what is right". Finn admires both Captain Phasma and Kylo Ren (Malak), but he realizes he's not prepared for the horrors of war.

    He is clearly obsessed with the decision to free Poe and would rather not have to help a prisoner escape, but he thinks it's the only option to escape the war because he can't fly the Tie-Fighter. Then during the film he expresses his concerns against the Republic and his lack of interest in war, fiercely arguing with Poe. Only because of her growing attachment to Rey he finally decides to join the Resistance, not because it's "the right thing to do" but because she is the person he loves.
    I wanted to create a more complex and not two-dimensional character like in the Disney film: who first is in the First Order and only the second after celebrates their death during his escape. Why should Finn enjoy killing his teammates? Is he a psychopath?
    I know the film unsubtle tells us the First Order are basically Nazis, but they are still people, right? They are not an army of clones or droids whose deaths we can blatantly ignore.
    There are already enough figures praising war in the real world, can we have a more honest mind in a fictional film?
    It's ridiculous to me that all the promises fans had when they saw the first trailer, and the limitless opportunities Finn's character had to offer are completely obliterate in his second scene. Believe me it's painful, because they could do anything ... anything else and it would have been at least something.
    They based a character on an idea full of potential, but essentially it remains an empty character waiting for something interesting to say or do. His former alliance with the First Order is quickly dismissed and is never used as an interesting or useful trait.


    5. The new trio
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    Another big change: Poe reunites with Finn at the end of First Act and not at the end of Act II. If Finn is a wasted character, it is even more difficult to define Poe. If at least Finn starts with an interesting idea Poe has almost nothing, his only quality is that he is a good pilot ... ok, but in the Disney version Rey is a good pilot too (so much so that in the third movie is even hinted that Rey is actually better), so why do we need Poe?
    I thought Poe, Rey and Finn were going to be Han, Luke and Leia for the new trilogy ... but that's not the case, because we already have a Han in the Disney movie: Han. Sorry to disappoint you, but Han shouldn't be a major character. Poe should be. For me, Han is supposed to play the same part that Obi Wan plays in a new hope, and for the most part he does, Lucas knew that for the trilogy to work he would have to focus on the relationship between Luke and Han and not Luke and Obi Wan. Why? Because Obi Wan dies.
    If you build a movie about the relationship between two characters and one of them dies in the end, some people might say you wasted time for nothing, especially if you're trying to lay the groundwork for a trilogy. (side note: Lucas himself however didn't keep this lesson for the prequel, he focused the first film on the relationship between Anakin and Qui Gon instead of Anakin and Obi Wan making Episode I effectively a false start).
    At the beginning of the film we see that Leila has a strong bond with Poe, I think it is natural that Han also knows Poe. Leia sent Han not only to retrieve the data, but also (and for the most) to rescue Poe, who became Han's second pilot after Chewbacca's injury. His presence on the Millennium Falcon also causes Rey discover the truth about Finn's identity much earlier, allowing their relationship to develop better and have more ups and downs.
    My version of the film is not very much based on the relationship between Han and Rey (as I have already mention), Rey is not a formidable dpilot, he is a good mechanic but it ends there.
    Poe is the pilot. My version gives Poe a lot more character. He is not only the first choice for Leia's mission, but he also serves as Han's companion during Chewbacca's absence; not only is he saved by Finn, but he quickly becomes an obstacle between him and Rey's relationship.


    6. A foxy crime lord
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    I didn't really like Maz's alien design. He's just mean to me. So I turned her into an Amaran (short aliens with fox features). But design isn't the only change. He also acts more like a crime boss, a tiny being with an imposing and menacing demeanor, he's cute and kind but he can also turn into a ferocious and scary gangster.
    Illegal fights between monsters and gladiators took place in his castle (something I stole from Grakkus, the Hutt). Han works for her, he had to deliver the Rathtar to her.
    Rey finds the lightsaber box in an arsenal among other rare weapons. In the basement are also the cells of other interesting monsters that will later unleash during the fight with the First Order.
    We didn't know much about Maz in the original film, with some minor tweaks we understand his relationship with Han, why he has a lightsaber and also why he knows so much about the Jedi and the Force (again, features I stolen from Grakkus).
    Not to mention that one of my favorite scenes in the saga is the arena fights of Geonosis, I love monsters and in the sequel there is a depressing lack of them (Rathtar are not "good" monsters and after Solo I started wondering if they were part of some Chinese fetish chechlist the studio had to fill in).


    7. Finn's Reflexion
    [​IMG] To make Finn's characters more intriguing, he needs a true antagonist. So I changed Captain Phasma a bit. Throughout the film Phasma tries several times to cover up Finn's betrayal, even going so far as to suggest that in fact Finn may have freed Poe just to gain his trust and thus recover the stolen data. During the battle on Takodama she also tries to convince Finn to return to the First Order, a proposal that Finn considers for a few seconds before they are interrupted by a blaster strike.
    The revelation of Kylo's mask doesn't occur, instead it is Phasma who took off his helmet in the Third Act as Finn points a blaster to her head, then reveals that they were both from the same planet (Parnassos) which was devastated after a biochemical accident from a great industrial cooperation. They join the First Order because the New Republic has abandoned their planet and has not condemned the industry, which is a major funder of the government. Their relationship will be one of the central elements of the entire trilogy, because in the second film he will reveal to Finn that in revenge for the destruction of one of the main planets (due to the Starkiller base) the new Republican fleet destroyed Parnassos, which was one of the first planets to join the First Order. Their internal struggle and moral dilemma will be a reflection of the larger galactic civil war (I could say I have stolen this concept from the Lost Stars novel and the realationship beetween Thane Kyrell and Ciena Re, but I had this idea after seeing Jannah in Episode IX ).


    7. Bad Timing
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    Kylo Ren's true identity is revealed much later in the film, only when Han and Leia meet do we discover that the villain of the story is actually their son.
    Snoke is very different from the Emperor (he is not a Sith lord, nor is he a clone of Palpatine), in fact he tries to achieve a bloodless victory. He does not want to carry out a coup as much as a revolution of the poor planets oppressed by the politics of the New Republic. There was a long Cold War-like period prior to the film's event, only after the New Republic refused to listen to the demands of the Outer Rim planets, which Snoke represents, did the First Order begin planning a war. The First Order's main goal is to recreate a government where everyone is treats equal and every planet counts.
    In reality it is General Hux, more pragmatic and violent, who orders the use of the Starkiller weapon in contrast to Snoke's orders.
    Thanks to Leia's word we will discover that in the past Snoke has tried to find multiple diplomatic ways to make the needs of the Outer Rim planets felt, but they have all been rejected for his political ideology. Leia displays an unhealthy stubbornness, she wants to prove that Snoke (and the First Order by extension) is evil because otherwise she has to admit her responsibility for him for the outbreak of war due to his previous diplomatic failures. She also feels guilty about her son's decision to join the First Order because she feels she has disappointing him. This doesn't make Leia the bad guy, because we also learn she had an impossible task to fulfill: reconstructing the Galaxy after the Empire defeat (I'll return on this in the second movie).


    8. Jedi Occlumancy
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    Rey's interrogation scene is unimaginative and underwhelming.
    When I saw it I reminded me Snape's occlumance lesson in HP5, but while in HP they showed us what the character sees in the vision, in SW they tell us about it (violating one of the most recognizable rules of cinema: Show don 'tell) and making the scene incredibly static and boring. I guess using visions to make the scene more intense and suspenseful would be too distracting, but they use visions in the movie when Rey touches the lightsaber, so why not use them in a more meaningful scene?
    I made this change not only to show a new kind of force power, but also to suggest a strange bond between Rey and Kylo, Rey interacts with Kylo in the vision during his mind probe, something that has never happened to him before, it also shows Kylo's deepest hidden desire to become the Emperor, demonstrating that despite his intentions of peace and justice he is actually acting only for personal gain, that beneath his high ideals lurks a narcissistic and selfish person.


    7. Unknowning something they should know
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    The concept of BB8 data complementing those of r2.d2 is kind of poetic, but if you stop and think about it, it doesn't make any sense. Because BB8 has a piece of a known galaxy map, which may be incomplete but there is still enough information to pinpoint Luke's location.
    But ok, let's accept this inconsistency (which probably only boogled me and a few other fussy people), the fact that the whole film revolves around finding Luke's location is (to quote a Calamari) a trap. It will never be satisfactorily resolved. What could Luke do against the First Order?
    Even if he manages to kill Snoke, or Kylo, he won't end the war. Someone probably thinks that Luke has already ended a war by "killing" Palpatine, but that's not entirely true. In the first place the Galactic War did not end with the death of Palpatine (also according to the canon the war ended with the Battle of Jakku), secondly the most logical reason for the defeat of the Empire was not the death of Palpatine but the destruction of the Second Death Star, with which Luke has almost nothing to do (I'll come back to this later) that crushed the morale and pride of the imperial troops.
    My version of the movie it's not really about the Resistance trying to find Luke location, but rather try to find evidence of the First Order wrongdoing, hoping that the crypted data cointains some useful information.
    However like in the movie they found out the data cointains Luke location's (coordinate all'esterno della galassia nelle Unknow Region) and start to questioning how the First Order have those coordinate and why they want to find Luke.
    In my version, the Resistance is not trying to find Luke's location, but rather to find evidence of the First Order's wrongdoing to prove his bad intentions to the Republic for the Republic fleet to intervene, they hope the encrypted data contains some revealing informations.
    However, as in the movie, they discover that the data contains indeed Luke's location (coordinates outside the galaxy in the Unknown Region) and they begin to wonder how the First Order got those coordinates and why they want to find Luke.
    In the Disney movie, there are contradictory reasons why the First Order wants to find Luke: because if (according to the movie) Luke is the only one who can defeat them why the hell did they want to find him? It would make sense if the First Order wanted to destroy the information, but no, they actually want to find Luke ... why? There's no real explanation for this (well ... except killing him of course, but he doesn't seem to be an imminent threat to their power, so why bother?), And in the second movie the First Order stops worrying about Luke at all, so what is the reason of his searching in the first place? It's ludicrous and it doesn't make any sense, in my version it's still ludicrous, but there's some kind of a good reason the First Order wants to find Luke and it's not to kill him (it0s maybe even crazier).

    1. A reverse chasing
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    There is no reason to argue that Episode VIII, plotwiset, features a long and slow chase between the First Order and the Resistance. It's a incredibly boring idea so... I didn't quite change that, but I swapped the two players.
    In fact, the First Order did not annihilate the entire New Republic with the Starkiller attack, but only one of the Core Worlds. Thus the entire fleet of the New Republic suddenly realizes the danger of the First Order and joins the Resistance at war quickly outnumbering the forces of the First Order.
    The First Order is on the run, the Resistance does not destroy them hoping it will lead them to the rest of their forces to destroy them once and for all. The story is therefore in direct contrast to Empire Strikes Back, we see all the potential of the New Republic but also its lack of compassion and understanding, the forces of the New Republic are more like the imperial ones: they are highly trained and ruthless while the First Order it is made up of younger idealists with little equipment and less experience.


    2. A truly positive character
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    You will be surprised to know that in my version my favorite character is Rose Dameron (in my version she is the adopted sister of Poe). Not only she will be playing a key role in ending the war, but she also be the main protagonist of a spin-off trilogy.
    Rose Tico is a painful character to watch and has nothing to do with Kelly Marie Tran. Her character is just plain awful and grievously written, way too serious and depressing.
    I swapped her role for Finn's, made her sort of the comic relief while Finn is a more serious character. Her main inspiration was the character of Ed from Cowboy Bepop, she is a technological genius, she built BB8 and he is her “ped” (personal electronic device) as Ein is almost Ed's pet.
    She is also clumsy and naive, not very familiar with human interactions unable to understand social conventions, spending most of her life in her electronics laboratory. She has a crush on Finn, but she is more like as an affection because she is primarily an asexual character. She often acts like a child even though she is 16, she is always cheerful and giggles even making some weird joke that only she seems to understand. She is always barefoot wearing a yellow mechanic overalls and welder's goggles.
    She is a very odd character who appears not to belong to the Star Wars franchise, but that is how the original Holdo character was introduced. His creator (Claudia Gray) described her as "somebody who's a bit off-kilter, who sees the world through a prism most others don't understand. (...) We don't really have a lot of true oddballs in Star Wars, so it was fun to introduce one!"
    Her constant and childlike happiness might seem off-putting at first, but we will learn that she is actually a thoughtful positive attitude, she always chooses to see the best of everyone and any situation, She is optimistic, friendly, outgoing, soft-hearted, and carefree with a happy-go-lucky attitude.


    3. A different kind of villain
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    If Holdo is so different in the book, why use his name in the film? I do not understand.
    In my version, I replaced Admiral Holdo with Baron Seron Yogg, a serpentine alien whose homeworld was destroyed by the First Order attack. He behaves much like a villain, his resentment of the First Order ends with the destruction of Parnassus despite Poe's objection. Without Leia's presence he will take control of the Resistance fleet to lead them in an unbridled and merciless attack on the enemy.
    He is a hard leader, unafraid of making difficult decisions and unflinching in her will to do what he sees as right. He is stubborn, unable to accept ideas other than his own. It shows his intentions were good, but in his path of vengeance he lost his sense of judgment and rationality. I borrowed a lot of this character traits from the character of Helena Cain from the Battlestar Galactica tv series (also the all chase concept of the movie constantly remind me of the first episode of that serie). He's clearly a villain but we understand his motivations.


    4. The Dude
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    Another switch I made is the one between Luke and Leia. In my version of the story after the events of Episode VI Luke wanted to refound the Jedi Council to help form the new Republic, but was eventually ousted from all decision-making powers so that he decided to withdraw from the Galaxy to live in solitude. Luke is neither depressing nor sorry, but instead lives in peace after accepting his fate.
    Luke unveil that the Force is much more powerful than he thought, it is an almost divine entity that controls the balance of the Galaxy, and the more powerful he would become, the more likely it was that another being would be born on the dark side to balance its power. This is the same reason he was able to destroy the Death Star and inspire his generation to win the wqr against the Empire, he was chosen by the Force (the Light Side) to balance the Galaxy once again (as his father has chosen by the Dark Side).
    This explains the cyclical course of SW history and the inevitable civil war in a galaxy so populated by different alien races and cultures, but also suggests that Rey had to do something different to end the cycle.
    Luke is more joyful and a bit of a joker (pun intended). He lived a happy life in harmony with himself and his surrounding. He accepted everything that happened because everything has a reason to happen. He left the Galaxy not because he tried to kill his nephew but because according to his Force his journey was complete. He realized that the Force had no other plans for him and became a kind of Gray Jedi, he doesn't want to have anything to do with the situation in the Galaxy because he can't change the will of the Force, he's not that powerful.
    He recognizes the danger of the First Order and feels the pain of war (even from another galaxy) but believes the Force will find a way to balance things, as it has done through him in the past.


    5. Momma's Boy
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    Leia, on the other hand, is a sadder character because the burden of the failures of the New Republic weighs on her shoulders. After the First Order attack, Leia did not return to the spaceship using her Force, she is captured by her son and held captive in a secret location (Korriban's Academy).
    Finn and Rose's side quest is not about finding a way to hack the First Order tracking device, but about finding out where Kylo took Leia. It is also a secret mission because only Poe sees Kylo capture Leia after the bridge explodes, Baron Yogg believes she is dead like all the other Resistance leaders.
    The idea that Leia is again taken prisoner could be a reference to ANH, but in this case Leia want to be held in hostage, to understand Kylo motivation and convincing him to end the conflict (after being very hangry at him for Han's death).
    During the film, as Luke trains Rey, we also have Kylo interrogating his mother trying to prove his involvement and responsability in the injustices of the New Republic. We thus learned that Leia was committed by politcs to perform an impossible task: rebuild a fair and democratic government after 20 years of an autocratic and corrupt system. We learn that the revelation that she is Vader's daughter has filled her with insecurities and guilt, mirroring how Kylo feels about her and the reasons why he has decided to join the First Order to make things better. We learn that defeating the Empire was not the hardest thing, but rather rebuilding a proper government. Leia is the one who struggle the most, the one who sacrificed the most and despite all her efforts she acknowledges that she has failed to fullfill her goal.
    The story is more about Kylo and Leia's relationship than Kylo and Luke's. Is about two sons who have tried to redeem their parent's mistakes and sins, it is about reconciliation and acknowledging the flaws in people without judging them or feeling superior, because everyone have flaws..


    6. The Sith Knights
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    My Episode VIII begins with the Knights of Ren, who are all Sith using the red lightsaber. They are tasked by Malak (Kylo Ren) to kidnap all force-sensitive children (it is not the First Order that kidnaps children to turn them into stormtroopers) and then they bring them to Korriban Sith Academy.
    In the third act of the film, Finn's side mission ends right on the planet when he, Rose, JB and Chewbacca rescue Leia and the kidnapped children (no frigging horse).
    We also learn that Leia could always escape from the prison because she has a portable shoto lightsaber hidden in his cane.

    7. Any Snoke theory sucks, even the one Disney gave us
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    I must point out that I hated all the "Your Snoke Theory Sucks" that the creators of the film (even Rian Johson himself) have promoted. It was the most horrible and idiotic way to deal with criticism. But they kind have a point, they directed hatred towards fans who have nothing to do with the problem, but they had a point. Snoke's identity was another trap placed by JJ, I don't think he would ever have had a good payout. So how did I defuse this trap? I did not.
    But I used the character of Snoke in a meta and ironic way. Snoke is essentially a Star Wars fanboy - so focus on his obsession to forget what the thing originally meant, someone who is so eager to be right that he loses the ability to communicate with another person in order to share, learn or evolve. He serves as a mockery when fans (myself included) get too upset defending their beliefs, become fanatics and lost all connection with the real world.
    Snoke was an imperial officer who was so obsessed with the figure and myth of Darth Vader that he inflicted the same pain and scars on himself, his skin is ashen because he burned himself in Mustafar's lava in a sort of ritual of purification to become more like his hero. His origin story may sound crazy but it is also very creepy and unsettling, one of my inspirations for the characters was actually Mason Verger from the movie Hannibal.


    8. Light & Dark
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    The reason this trilogy doesn't belong in the Skywalker saga is because it's meant to introduce the characters of Azeloth, Amaransta (the Light Side) and Zukoi (the Dark Side). When Rey enters the black well she is transported into the Void, another dimension outside the Galaxy, there are the Force entities trapped in an obsidian mirror prison, they are two ethereal and cephalopods creatures bound together.
    This allows me to explore one of the most mysterious concepts in Star Wars Univers: The Force.
    In the original trilogy, the Force was very similar to magic, it was a power that some people can use.
    In the prequel Lucas, however, changes everything by introducing the concept of the Chosen One, creating a universe of predestination. The Force is no longer a power that someone can use, but instead becomes a kind of entity (Midi-chlorian) that uses people to achieve its goals.
    Personally I would have preferred the Force to remain a magical tool in a sci-fi setting, but I also think it's more interesting if the Force itself has some kind of motive.
    Someone might feel safe if they knew that there is a benevolent entity (the Force or God) acting as a guide for our universe, and that is fine. But I find it a bit disturbing, if the Force balances the Universe then no one has free will anymore, no matter what all the Star Wars characters do, every choice they make will be part of the will of the Force.
    So the Dark Side and the Light Side in my version become similar to gods with the power to decide the fate of the Galaxy in an ongoing struggle to find balance.


    9. An epic fight
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    While it wasn't what I expected, I think the final duel between Kylo and Luke is quite original, it's something different than any other Star Wars duel: it's new, suspenseful and surprising... the only problem I have is: it shouldn't have worked out.
    Not because there is no evidence that a Jedi can make a projection of himself from light years away, but because the First Order shouldn't have landed on the planet when at the beginning of the film they proved they could destroy a planet from space; they shouldn't have focused on one man instead of circling the Resistance base and blocking. all outputs. Everyone complained that a Jedi never did anything like this, it's not a problem for me, the problem is that incredibly stupid that the First Order fell for it, it's one of those countless scenes that looks cool but if you think for a moment to the big picture it immediately becomes stupid. The strangest thing is that even the film makes fun of that idea: a man can't defeat an entire army ... but then he kinda does, it should have been a heroic and epic moment but it turns out to be an unrealistic and dumb one.
    In my version Malak and his Sith Knights use Luke's X-Fighter to track his location and go to Anch'to to take him down. However, Luke shows how powerful he has become by fighting with all seven at the same time.
    I also want to dwell for a moment on Rey's healing power, which has attracted the disdain of many fans, per se I have no problem with it being introduced in the film, since in Kotor force healing was already present. The problem is how and when it is introduced: healing a huge monstrous worm I don't think was the most logical choice. I introduced it during the training with Luke, Luke demonstrates to Rey that a Jedi can learn to use Force to take the life of a living being by clenching his fist (like Darth Vader does when he uses Force choke) near a flower who immediately withers and dies and then shows her how a Jedi can also learn to heal by releasing his fist and making the flower bloom again, but then he teaches her that have the power to do something doesn't mean that you have the right to do it.

    1. The New Emperor
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    Between Episodes VIII and IX there is a jump of a couple of years. The First Order no longer exist, Malak has founded a New Empire. During this time Malak proves himself to be a relatevy benevolent and fair ruler listening to everybody demands and trying ro reunite a fragmented galaxy after the war. He has brought together most of the planets by having a peace treaty signed between the planets of the Outer Rim and those of the Core. But there are still some resistance dissidents trying to change things.However, despite his success, Malak is not satisfied and still seeks a way to gain even more power to restore balance to the galaxy once and for all.


    2. Beheading the betrayal
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    After the Resistance manages to destroy a major shipyard, Malak senses that a spy is among his closest collaborators and orders Phasma to investigate. She later finds evidence that accuses Hux, disappointed in the betrayal of the one he considered an ally and friend, Malak beheads him in a public execution revealing to the rest of the government his ruthless and violent nature.
    However, it turns out that it wasn't Hux the mole, but Captain Phasma herself who can no longer bear to hide and cover up the crimes the New Empire is committing behind the scenes. So she started sending information to the Resistance to show the public that the New Empire is actually not much better than the previous one.


    3. The Galaxy's Protector
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    Probably no one has made this comparison before, but I always thought that Lando had a lot of similarities to Mr. Satan from the Dragonball series.
    In my version Lando runs the Hologram Fun World a casino / themepark in which he is ossanized like the Galaxy Savior, where a reenactment show of the events of the original trilogy also takes place with Lando as the main hero, plays the role of Luke in the duel with Vader on Bespin (Vader will reveal that Obi Wan killed his father) and destroys the Death Star with the Millennium Falcon , eventually marries the Princess of Alderaan (similar to how Mr. Satan reenacts the events of the Cell's Game from his self-centered perspective).
    I wrote this storyline to address one of my main issues with the Return of the Jedi ending: Lando is technically the Chosen One ... because no matter what Vader, Luke, or Palpatine do during their final showdown, Lando would have blown up the Death Star and all three will be dead. So Vader didn't technically kill the Emperor, he would have died anyway, the only thing Vader actually accomplished was saving Luke's life ... and in a moral way Luke saves Vader's life or, to put it better, Anakin's.
    From a certain point of view: Lando saved the day. Lando kills the Emperor and defeats the Empire, Luke had very little to do with this, at least in the original film. To me this was actually good credit of the original trilogy: Luke was never the hero who saves the galaxy (as he is depicted in the Disney trilogy) Luke has the son who saves his father despite all the odds, Star Wars (despite the name) is not a film about a futuristic war in a distant galaxy, it's truly about family, forgiveness and love.


    4. The Rebellion's Avenger
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    I've changed a lot of things about Episode IX, but somehow I like Rey's true identity, but I've made some changes to make her more relevant to the story.
    Because my problem with Rey being a Palpatine is not that it doesn't make sense, but more importantly it's just pointless (I'll argue that even Leia's true origin reveals at the end of Episode VI is a little pointless, if something has nothing to do with the rest of the plot there is no reason to be in the plot).
    Rey's true origin would be relevant if it impacted Rey's character, Kylo or anyone else, which it doesn't, even Leia says she knew the truth and her reactions sum up what the audience is supposed to feel: nothing. Or it could have some impact on the story, if for example she actually kills Chewbacca, that would have been something! Or if thanks to her lineage she has some reason to become Empress (which is sort of mentioned, briefly) but in the end Rey being a Palpatine has no real impact on the story, even her final confrontation with her "grandaddy" has nothing to do with they being related but mainly with the fact that she and Kylo form "the dyad" that allows Palpatine to become SuperSayanSith.
    So I changed a few things: Firstly Rey is not technically a Palpatine, but she is a clone (I took literally the phrase "your parents were nobody"), the perfect being I mentioned in my rewrite of the Episode VI.
    Second, his adoptive parents were not chased by a Sith assassin, but instead by an assassin from the Rebellion. In fact, Lando reveals to Poe, Finn and Rey that after the war many Rebels were not satisfied with the policy implemented by the new republic and had founded an extremist group: "The Children of the Sunset" to track down all the former officers, collaborators or sympathizers of the Empire. including the adoptive parents of Rey Gero and Brianna Surik who were two brilliant scientists.
    Rey's origin still comes from the Empire but it has a purpose, it embodied the endless quest for revenge between the Empire and the Resistance, a cycle that she is supposed to end. She tracked down his parents' assassin (an old Pau'an played by Max von Sydow) to kill him because she thinks he had ruined her life.


    5. The NightSister
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    Malak and Rey's journeys are very different in my version, they are not looking for a way to reach Palpatine (also because Palpatine is dead) but as Rey finds her origin Malak will seek a deeper meaning of what causes the balance in the Galaxy and how the Force works. I introduced a new character: a Dathomir historian who will reveal to him that there is a way to communicate with the dead, particularly with Darth Vader whose presence seems to haunt him.
    The two develop a brief relationship and travel to Dathomir, when the historian is revealed to be one of the last Nightsisters (whom Vader has slaughtered). Malak is trapped in a sacrificial ritual so that the spirits of the past take revenge on what Vader did, however during the ritual Malak actually manages to enter the world of the dead where he meets and talks to the ghost of Vader. Anakin will reveal to his nephew that his search for a higher power will be in vain and will lead him deeper and deeper into the Dark side causing his downfall.

    6. No Palpatine, but also Palpatine
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    The final showdown is not between Rey and Palpatine, but between Rey and Malak. Thanks to a holocron message from Palpatine both discover their origins. In fact, Palpatine reveals that Vader was also some sort of clone, he implanted him into Shmi's body through the Force. He hoped that thanks to him and the false prophecy of the Chosen One he would be able to overthrow the Republic and rule the Galaxy. However Anakin's mother was also his weak point, recognizing what love is made him weak and unable to fully embrace the Dark Side and his true potential. So he decided that Rey would be born without parents but through a machine that prevented her from developing any kind of attachment or positive emotion (this is an aimed attack at the preposterous idea of the prequels that to become a Jedi one had to snatch children from their mother hands before they could develop any type of affection, a practice that only a ruthless psychopath would use to create indoctrinated child soldiers).
    Rey and Malak realize that they have only been pawns to a long-dead madman. They also realize that the events set in motion by Palpatine are now beyond their control and the only thing left for them to do is fight to find out who is the best of the 2.


    7. How to beat a narcisist
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    No last kiss before death. Rey beats Malak after ruining his face with lightning, but when she stops, she realizes that like she did with his parents' killer, she can't kill Malak, she can't kill the Emperor like Luke/Vader did, he had to find a new way. She then leaves him, walks away as Malak shouts for an end to the fight even though she has already proven to be a more powerful Jedi.
    This ending is a bit weird, how can I end a final duel without one of the protagonists dying? And technically Malak dies, because his anger at being defeated has driven him mad causing the building to collapse on him.
    Moreso this ending is taken from the TV series Merlin, which has one of the most memorable endings of a final conflict ever, just by walking away. Which happens to be the most effective way to resolve a dispute when you understand that your opponent doesn't want to find a mediation's point but just wants to fight to nourishing his ego.


    8. Cyber Battle Meditation
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    How does the war end? Similar to the original trilogy, it is not Rey / Luke who wins the war but the effort of everyone else, in this case in particular by Rose Dameron. If you're not familiar with Battle Meditation, I might understand, it's one of the many things I stole from Kotor: where Battle Meditation was a Force power (mostly of Bastila Shan) that considerably boosted morale, stamina and the overall battle prowess of an allied individual while simultaneously reducing the opposition's combat effectiveness while eroding their willingness to fight.
    However, in the case of Rose Dameron Battle Meditation has more to do with her technology and hacking ability than anything else. Basically she is able to take control of the entire Resistance fleet and move it as a single precisive swarm (also thanks to the expertises of his older brother), in addition she is able to jam the control of the New Empire fleet and disable their shields. Also Captain Phasma and many dissidents of the New Empire plays an important role fighting the loyalists, in a combined effort to end the war with the least necessary casualties.


    9. The veil of Death
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    The film doens't ends with Luke and Leia's ghost (although Luke's ghost makes an appearance) but with a ghostly and frightening figure escaping the portal that Malak passes during the sacrificial ritual on Dathomir. This is Azeloth the main villain of the sequel trilogy. As I said at the beginning, my whole idea for the fourth trilogy is about exploring the mysticism of the Force and the struggle between the Dark side and the Light side, where the answer cannot be eradicated one in lieu of the other, we cannot get rid of bad things to feel good, we have to accept the inherent evil of the world and the pain of life (Malak was unable to accept the wrongs in the galaxy and his naivety and stubbornness led him on a dark path).
    Before the last scene, the film ends with Rey founding a Jeddha temple, a new kind of philosophy that embraces the true concept of balance. Something that has similarities to the concept of the Gray Jedi but not quite. The Gray Jedi is someone who rejects the teaching of the Jedi and the Sith, who recognizes that they both have flaws and are biased, so he rejects both, a perfect example is Jolee Bindo (of Kotor, and yes ... there will be a lot more references to Kotor in the fourth trilogy, because Kotor is my favorite Star Wars story).
    But what I don't like about the Gray Jedi (although I considered them the most enlightening and honest about the Force) is their indifference to what happens to other people, which makes sense because the Jedi only care about others (or at least what they should do) and the Sith only care about themselves, so to counter both the Gray Jedi don't care about anyone. Which is what Luke is in the Disney trilogy, Luke has become a true Gray Jedi, and even in my version of the story he's a bit of a Gray Jedi.
    However the Gray Jedi cannot be the ultimate answer, because is true that the world is not Black or White... but it's not Gray either: it's a rainbow of colors.
    My version of Azeloth does not represent the dark side, it is a herald of Chaos while Rey and the new Jeddha represent balance. Dark Krayt is also not a Sith, but a settler from another Galaxy working for the Yuzzhang Vong (who are also slightly different from the originals because I combined them with Killik Colony).
     
    #4 Dryden Valiance, Mar 28, 2022
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