Star Wars:Shadows-my book

I've recently started writing a SW book called Star Wars:Shadows of the Skywalkers. My summary(still would recommend reading the chapters even if the summary sounds displeasing-I still have a problem to write a good one ):

They were lost.
They turned on the people they loved and would've fought for before...turned to te Dark Side.
Is this what they wanted? Lose who they were to their new faces? To Darth Vader and Kylo Ren?
They have to face their past to fulfill their destinies'. They have to accept their past..or destroy it.
They soon understand it isn't a simple decision they can make.It's like them:not just black and white.
Darth Vader. Kylo Ren. Their shadows will always haunt them and try to hold them from their darkness.




If you don't know,I'm 15 and live in a non-everyday speaking country so it's possible that the vocabulary could be raw(improving on that). Here's the cover to get you interested


The book is available to read on Wattpad(obviously for free).All you need is a Wattpad account I presume(You can log in using one of your social media accounts).
Would mean a lot if you would give it a try and criticize what I did wrong-always trying to improve it.
Link:
https://www.wattpad.com/story/76359901-star-wars-shadows

#MTFBWY

Update:Had improved,in my opinion,a lot since I posted this thread and have a beta reader @wickedteam who helps out so much, so it should be much easier to read without seeing typos' etc.

 

Thanks! Every chapter will definitely be better! Just thought: Is it difficult to read? Like the sentencing, vocabulary, could put people off?

 

Yikes,I'll have to look into that dialogue again. I'm also 100% sure I'll be rewriting the whole book once I've finished it(correcting,adding stuff etc). Thanks for the thoughts!