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Star Wars Draft Movie Reveal and Afterparty!!

Discussion in 'General Movie Discussion' started by Use the Falchion, May 4, 2021.

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    @Lock_S_Foils @oldbert @Jayson @gholc15 @Flyboy @DarthSnow @RoyleRancor Happy Star Wars Day, and here we go!

    We're a little (...okay...a lot...) late, but better late than never. Today, it's time to reveal your movies!

    For this, I'd ask for two rules.
    The first is that you remind us of your picks again - after all, while we go through the stories, we want to imagine the characters in their chosen roles!
    The second rule is that you separate your "afterparty/bts" post from your "reveal" post. This may mean posting it right after someone else posts or waiting a few hours until it won't count as a Double Post. (The two may end up being one-and-the-same.)

    Other than that, let's have fun!
     
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    what is the “after party” post? I only have one pitch for my movie
     
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    If you have an idea that didn't make it into the pitch, or you want to go through the process of how your pitch came to be, or just any extra thoughts or things you want to share once all is said an done, that's what the "afterparty" is!
     
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    Ok....strap in....here we go!!!

    Star Wars Standalone movie – “RED LEADER”

    Focused on life of Garven Dreis and the rise of the “Rarefied Air Cavalry” on the planet Virujansi. Main plot line is the attempted Imperial takeover of Virujansi (led by Governor Vanek Gaines) and the development of starfighter pilots and Virujansi’s own home-defence Rarified Air Cavalry “Air Cav” by Antoc Merrick/Dreis. Side plot the secret development of "Project X-Ray" (Beolar Bribbs, Dr Julett Vanokk), and Incom Corporation’s clandestine efforts to get Project X-Ray to the Rebellion while the company was under scrutiny by the Empire. These two plot lines come together as Incom seeks the Air Cav’s experience and ideas in the secret development and deployment of the X-Ray. Woven through the movie is the main theme -- the rise of Garven Dreis as a friend, expert pilot, and leader in the critical early days of the Rebellion. Also, his mentorship of younger pilots, and how he learned to be a leader from Antoc Merrick. The squadron scenes of this movie will be shot in the spirit of the WWII "Battle of Britain" and the outstanding 1969 movie of the same name. By this I mean that the Air Cavalry squadron pilots will be shown to be young, and mostly inexperienced, against a great foe in numbers of enemy spacecraft (TIE fighters). If you are familiar with the movie Battle of Britain there is a rousing score covering the actions of the British pilots and my vision is for this movie to have the same "feeling" and also a rousing score as well when the young pilots scramble to intercept the Imperial forces.

    Special Note: This movie will bring cinematic starfighter space combat to the “next level” in moviemaking, with new and imaginative camera angles, powerful sound, and an effort to portray starfighter cockpit dynamics at the most realistic level ever seen. We will use the “Volume” technology of The Mandalorian to bring complex space fighter combat to the next level.

    Director

    - Neill Blomkamp

    - Experienced in hyper-realistic sci-fi with District 9, Elysium, and Chappie. Arguably some of the most realistic spacecraft and futuristic structures (“Ringworld” in orbit in Elysium…the sight of the monstrous spacecraft over Johannesburg in D9) seen in modern movies.

    - I am expecting Blomkamp to take cinematic space combat to the next level

    Composer

    - Hans Zimmer

    - One of the most accomplished composers in movie history. I have always wanted to experience Zimmer’s “take” on Star Wars. The closest we have gotten I guess is Samuel Kim Music’s channel on YT (Zimmer and Star Wars mashups).

    ScreenWriters

    - Michael Stackpole and Tony Gilroy

    - Stackpole is an expert in starfighter combat writing with his numerous novels, all well-received.

    - Gilroy’s Star Wars experience with Rogue One is superb, his re-imagining of the 3rd Act of that movie was amazing. His “war movie”-like experience will go well with our movie.

    Cast

    - Jake McDorman as Garven Dreis AKA “Boss” AKA “Red Leader”

    - Ben Daniels as Antoc Merrick AKA “The Old Man”

    - Sharlto Copley as Imperial Governor Vanek Gaines appointed to Virujansi

    - Angela Bassett as Dr Julett Vanokk, Chief Engineer of Incom Corporation

    - Steve Buscemi as Beolars Bribbs (Sullustan), the CEO of Incom

    - Daniel Kaluuya as Skade “Shooter” Tornrider, pilot in Rarified Air Cavalry

    Supporting Cast

    - Dev Patel as Dat “Viper” Vepel, pilot in Rarified Air Cavalry

    - Colin O’Donoghue as Niloc “Dagger” Egonodo, pilot in Rarified Air Cavalry

    - Lock_S_Foils as an Aerospace Engineer, Incom Corporation, Incom HQ Building, 28th Floor, Cubicle # 28B6, on Fresia


    OPENING CRAWL

    The Galaxy is in transition. After centuries of rule, the Galactic Republic is being challenged by the rise of the EMPIRE.

    On the small planet of Virujansi, a young GARVEN DREIS has dreams of being a star pilot. Soon even Virujansi will feel the coming of the EMPIRE, forcing DREIS and his friends to make a decision, either surrender or join the REBELLION. They choose to fight, and young DREIS has to grow up quickly and become a leader.

    Our story begins sometime before this strife....

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    Opening SceneNOTE: The Star Wars fanfare for the opening crawl will be done by Hans Zimmer. I am asking him for his take on this theme…..same John Williams theme, just by Zimmer.

    Opening Crawl then camera pans down to the planet Virujansi, and the small moon Epsilon-12……

    A GR-75 Transport from the Onderon Freight Corporation is departing orbit…..cut to shot of interior, pilot transmits “Sector Control, OFC-6 requesting departure clearance..”

    “OFC-6, Sector Control, standard departure vector approved”

    OFC-6 changes course and begins departing Virujansi orbit…..as they pass Epsilon-12 three small fast moving XS-class light freighters begin an intercept course. The freighters are painted garishly and armed with twin pulse cannons. As they pull in behind the OFC they fire several warning shots across their bow.

    “SECTOR CONTROL…OFC-6…..WE ARE BEING INTERCEPTED AND FIRED UPON……LOOKS LIKE BETA PIRATES AGAIN….NEED HELP”

    OFC-6 raises their light shielding.

    Cut to interior of one of the XS class, a scruffy looking humanoid captain transmits “This is Thrakk from the Beta Cartel….drop your shields and prepare to be boarded…”

    OFC-6 Captain requests priority secure channel from his comm officer and transmits “Any Air Cav units in sector 32 Alpha, this is OFC-6, we need IMMEDIATE ASSISTANCE we are under pirate attack…”

    Cut to nearby orbit, three Z-95 Headhunter fighters in tight formation……Flight Lead Antoc “Boss” Merrick, with Garven “Dave” Dreis and Skade “Shooter” Tornrider. Cut to shot of the fuselage , a prominent yellow and black emblem shows a horse with 3 symbolic starfighters streaking skyward…..

    Cut to cockpit of lead Z-95….

    Antoc Merrick….“OFC-6, this is Razor Flight lead…..we have your position….we are enroute at max speed….”….Merrick transmits to his flight…”Dave…Shooter…on me. We have company..push it up and put your deflectors on, double front….”

    Cut to Dave and Shooter’s cockpits…..”Roger, boss”

    [The rousing "Air Cav" theme starts and we are introduced to the young pilots protecting this planet...]

    The Z-95’s break and ignite engine boost…..meanwhile the OFC is jinking and juking, attempting to throw off their pursuers.

    Razor Flight blasts in from under the OFC and they split immediately in a breathtaking maneuver in 3 different directions. They hunt down the pirates and eventually destroy 2 while the Pirate lead Thrakk is forced to break off…during the fight, Dreis makes an incredible maneuver, pulling back at max G and thrust and turning inside the pirate to line up for the kill….Shooter makes some amazing maneuvers as well but nearly overheats his engines as he runs it at “redline” nozzle temperature for too long (rookie mistake)…..

    Razor Flight reforms into a tight wedge formation and flashes across the flightline at their base on Virujansi, peeling off and landing in sequence…..once on the ground the three pilots meet up as they walk off the flightline.

    Dreis, to Shooter : “Hey Shooter what happened up there…..too long at redline?”

    Shooter: “Yep I lost SA in the fight and didn’t watch engine temps…”

    Dreis: “The Z-95 is pretty forgiving but you’ve gotta watch those nozzle temps…..we’ll work on it some more with you…..”

    Shooter, to Dreis “Thanks….Hey Dave that was an amazing move…..you need to teach me that someday….”

    Dreis: “Yep, thanks, learned that a long time ago here in the caves…”

    Dreis (to Boss Merrick): “Hey boss….seems like a million years ago…..remember the south ridge borecrawler run…?

    …………screen fades to flashback………..

    Young Merrick and Dreis are flying T-16s down the South Ridge run, a series of borecrawler caves on Virujansi…..

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    Act 1 (Just before Clone Wars, around 23 BBY – Clone Wars 22 – 19 BBY)

    Opening crawl, opening scene with Air Cav intercepting pirates. Flashback to young Dreis and Merrick (may need to de-age Ben Daniels) flying T-16s down the borecrawler caves on Virujansi (borecrawlers were giant larval creatures that lived in large cave networks), wild flying, close quarters, just both of them having fun. Show some of the flora and fauna of Virujansi , which is a lush, temperate planet with sweeping plains and deep forests, show a herd of Equanni’s, which are horse-like creatures, with a large head and short neck, 6 legged (note this will tie in later to Dreis coming up with the name "Air Cavalry" for their planetary defense squadron)

    We are introduced to Vanek Gaines, backstory he is a ruthless and maniacal military leader in the Empire that is to be assigned as the new Regional Governor over Virujansi. Flashbacks to his time as Imperial officer including TIE fighter pilot and later squadron commander. A shot of him ordering his troopers to execute local indigenous humanoids/aliens on Imperial-seized planets. After his latest battle in which the Empire was victorious although at high casualties, Vanek is summoned to his Commanding Officer, where he is told he is being transferred to Regional Governor over the “quiet” Virujansi sector.

    Introduce Incom Corporation on the planet Fresia, Beolars Bribbs and Chief Engineer Dr Julett Vanokk. Pre-Empire days they are premiere and imaginative starship manufacturers. Show their assembly line with Z-95s, ARC-170s, and UT-60 (U-Wings) in various stages of manufacture. A Republic representative is touring their facilities and getting a briefing on their activities, which culminates in a purchase of more ARC-170 fighters. At the end of the scene, Bribbs and Vanokk are summoned by one of their Intel Officers into a classified briefing room for an update on “Project X-Ray” [we see nothing about what this project is…]

    We are introduced at this point to the young pilots led by Merrick, who form together to start a sort of “planetary defence squadron”, initially flying armed T-16s . At this point we will show Incom’s ties to Virujansi forming as they work with their planetary ruling council to convince them to move up to Z-95s.

    Several scenes of the squadron in action, culminating in their successful service during the Clone Wars. Dreis comes up with the name for their squadron – Rarified Air Cavalry, from a flashback of Merrick and himself as children riding the Equanni’s bareback across the Virujansi plains.

    Chief Engineer Vanokk arrives at Virujansi with a small contingent from Incom, and they gather in the Air Cav briefing room to talk about a new starfighter called “project X-ray”. They talk about the shortcomings of the Z-95 and what they would like to see in a new starfighter. Dreis mentions that they get a lot of new young pilots that are “backwoods pilots who cut their teeth on old bushhoppers and T-16’s. We need starfighters that are familiar to these young pilots….same basic controls and performance”. Merrick mentions that the new fighter should have more firepower than the Z-95s. Vanokk thanks them and rushes back to Fresia and Incom HQ.


    Act 2/CLIMAX

    Gaines arrives in Virujansi sector in the Star Destroyer “Vanquisher” along with embarked TIEs.
    Dreis rises in the Air Cav, mentored by Merrick. His young “hothead” tendencies are tempered and turned into superb leadership skill by Merrick. At this time we switch back to the Planet Fresia, the headquarters of Incom, and CEO Beolar Bribbs hosting an Imperial group of visitors who see only part of their factory facilities. They deliver an ultimatum to Bribbs- troops will arrive shortly and his company will be taken over by the Empire. Bribbs puts on a show and promises the Imperials that Incom will be ready for them when they return. Vanokk returns from her visit to Virujansi and goes to their secret underground facility , telling their X-Ray project manager about what she heard from Dreis and the Air Cav pilots. The manager tells her “yes ma’am we will incorporate those into our production and will have prototypes ready soon”.

    Cut back to Virujansi, during several battles the Air Cav starts to see the obsolescence of the Z-95 – the young pilots are pushed to their limits and are becoming more skilled, but the later models of TIE fighters and Pirate-modified freighters have more maneuverability and firepower than their Z-95s.


    Cut back to Fresia. Some time has passed and we see Bribbs and Vanokk getting an update on “Project X-Ray”. We only see their faces however and do not see what “Project X-Ray” is. During the briefing they are interrupted and told that they received a message from local Imperial forces saying they now have “3 days to prepare for the arrival of Imperial occupation forces and to be ready to turn over operation of the Incom Corporation to the Emperor”. One of their supervisors rushes to them and breathlessly tells them “the X-ray prototypes are ready however we don’t have time to test them…”. Vanokk says “…don’t worry. I have an idea…..prepare all prototypes for immediate departure and spin up their hyperdrives….”


    Back on Virujansi, the Air Cav is pushed to their limits, they have lost several young pilots and Z-95s. Just when they are on the ropes, Merrick gets a call from his sector surveillance that a “small force of fighters has just come out of hyperspace and is inbound. Their transponders are responding to our hails with authentic codes…they are not Imperial”


    Merrick and his pilots rush to the flightline, we cut to a closeup of the cockpit opening on a strange new starfighter. Merrick sprints to the lead fighter and Engineer Vanokk yells to him “Nice to see you Dave…..heard you need some help……”


    We pan back and see a force of ten brand new T-65 X-wings on the Air Cav flightline…..Merrick and Dreis smile and hug each other, pounding each other on their backs….


    …..Project “X-Ray” has arrived!!!


    Imperial Gov Gaines, during a temporary truce of combat, sends a message to the Air Cav asking their leadership to negotiate. Merrick calls Dreis and all Air Cav pilots into their briefing room and they put Gov Gaines on the speaker so they can all hear. Gaines offers all pilots of the Air Cav a choice to join the Empire as “The Emperor always needs good pilots, and your past transgressions will be forgiven”. Gaines gives them 48 hours to make their decision.


    The next scenes show the young pilots taking the X-Wings up for the first time…..they quickly get used to them as the controls are similar to the old T-16s and Z-95s….but the X-wings are much faster, and better armed than anything they have ever flown.


    TENSE SCENE – The 48 hours are up, and the Air Cav is in the briefing room on the speaker with Governor Gaines. Closeup of Dreis…. He looks around the briefing room into the faces of the other young pilots. They look him in the eye and start shaking their heads no…..every one he looks at, keeps their eyes locked on him , and shake their heads slowly…NO.

    Dreis looks at Merrick…shakes his head no.

    Merrick tells Gaines…..”Governor Gaines….your offer is REFUSED. You and your Imperial troops have worn out your welcome here. Depart from our sector NOW!”


    Merrick cuts the audio feed to Gaines, turns to the Air Cav, and tells them …. “Well boys, that’s that. Flight leads to the ready room now…..tell maintenance to spin up all available fighters”


    CLIMAX, Battle of Virujansi [this will be the BEST space combat scene EVER on film.....]. The young pilots in their new X-Wings turn the tide against Gaines’ and his Imperial forces. Woven into the battle will be Engineer Vanokk’s escape from Virujansi, with the help of Dreis. Gaines is forced to retreat with his remaining forces and Virujansi is liberated.

    Falling Action/Resolution
    After the battle, scenes of reconstruction on Virujansi. Merrick and Dreis are contacted by Mon Mothma who congratulates him on the liberation of his planet and his successful fight against the Empire. Mothma asks them to join the Rebellion and they concur. She asks them to transfer the bulk of their squadron to the planet Dantooine.

    Most of Air Cav departs Virujansi to Dantooine.

    Once there Merrick is hailed by Mothma again and urgently requested to go to a planet called “Yavin-four”

    Merrick takes part of Air Cav and renames it “Blue Squadron” and tells Dreis “Well Dave it’s time for you to lead your own squadron. You’ve earned it. I am proud of everything you have done, and will be your wingman any time”

    Dreis calls his pilots together and renames them “Red Squadron”

    Dreis becomes “Red Leader”….or….to his young pilots “The Old Man”

    Final scene and credits roll.

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    Here is the Rarified Air Cavalry patch I designed. It has heritage from the US Army's 1st Cavalry Division
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    Here is Garven Dreis's Z-95 Headhunter for the Air Cavalry
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    Great job! I like the focus on the piloting and how it connects to everything! Your level of detail on the dialogue was great as well, and I can see the importance of it in the overalls outline. I like the blend of business and geopolitics and Star Wars Imperial takeovers lol! Bravo! ...when's the sequel?
     
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    @Use the Falchion Thank you Sir. A couple things , I am a starfighter “junkie” so this movie scratches an itch for me. Also a huge military historian so the fight for Virujansi and the rise of the Air Cav have to have some impact on the context of the Rebellion.
     
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    Awesome! I'll go next, since I'll be on the road for a bit and just in case some news breaks that utterly upends my draft story.
    From Tyrfing Studios, I give you...

    Star Wars: The Knights of Twilight


    Tagline - "As surely as the sun sets, it will rise again."

    Pitch -

    It is the Twilight of an era. The Sith Republic sees the loss of its power by the very rules they created in order to keep it. More and more, the nomadic Jedi Order finds itself drawn to the pleas of a government that has forsaken them. The elusive Eternal Empire is gearing up, but for action or some other movement, no one can truly tell. And the Mandalorians, always ready, desire something greater. The galaxy is a powder keg about to explode, and a match has been lit….

    In the Peace Zone - a set of planets affiliated to no government - a Mandalorian Warlord (Jet Li) terrorizes citizens of a small town and claims the land for Mandalor. Former Jedi Council Grandmaster Trayien Silsee (Michelle Yeoh) and her former apprentice Ren (Harry Shum Jr.) leave the tension of the Inner-Rim and go to investigate this disturbance. After they uncover how truly dangerous this warlord is, Silsee and Ren must seek out allies and kindred spirits from all ideologies and walks of life in order to put a stop to the conquest before it sparks into something larger.


    Crew:

    Directors - The Russo Brothers

    Writers - Markus & McFeely

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    Composer - John Paesano

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    Cast:

    Michelle Yeoh as Trayien Silsee

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    Harry Shum Jr. as Ren -

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    Julie Estelle as Va Ohkos


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    Constance Wu as The Inquisitor

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    Lucy Liu as Vexa Wren

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    And featuring Jet Li as “The Warlord”

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    Story outline -


    Act 1: Rise of the Knights


    Synopsis: The Jedi hear of the Warlord, see the forces they’re up against, and gather allies.


    Key Scenes:
    The Warlord taking over.

    The Jedi receive word of an attack on the Sith Republic. Trayien decides to take a leave of absence and help out the Villagers instead. Her old Padawan comes back from a mission and joins her on her quest.

    The Fighter (Julie Estelle) Va Ohkos, saving Ren by pushing him out of the way and landing on him.

    Recruitment Scenes:

    The Warrior, Vexa Wren, Mandalore Imperatore via a sparring session.

    The Sith, Lady Inquisitor, via talking after seeing her kill and torture (off screen) two corrupt senators.

    The Preacher, a Knight of Zakuul named Lark-Inn, who joins because of the possibility of “saving souls.” (He goes by the Preacher after this, despite having a name.)

    The Sage, a Zeffo Sage who decides that his last act will be to record “the fall of another empire” in his words, and “plant the seeds of salvation.”

    He joins the team after everyone else has gathered back on the main planet.


    Act 2: The Long Day

    Synopsis: The Knights of Twilight must train the villagers to prepare for the oncoming battle.

    Key Scenes:

    We see why the Warlord is doing what he is doing

    In his retinue the Warlord has a Voss Mystic as a prisoner. The Mystic is able to see currents of the future. They see a masked warrior surrounded by their knights. The warrior strikes first at places no one expects. Their battles reshape the galaxy, and their journey starts here.

    We see training and preparation scenes.
    We also see character bonding:
    The Sith and Ohkos bond over their shared approach of motivating the villagers - fear.
    The Preacher and the Sith debate what justice means while building a death trap.
    Ren and Vexa bond over tactics and their views of how the battle will go. Vexa notes that a preemptive attack may help the outcome. Ren agees and decides to take care of that.
    Trayien and the Sage spend time with the injured and weak, helping assuage fears.
    The Sage delights the children of the village with tales of “The Mystery of the Rakatan Empire,” which intrigues Ren. Preacher is upset about there having been an Infinite Empire while his Eternal Empire exists.
    And more.

    The villagers ask Ren about what they should think about when the attack begins. Ren starts saying how they should think about their family and fight for them. The villagers then ask what Ren thinks about. Ren thinks for a moment and then pulls out his lightsaber, turning it on. He states that he really doesn’t think about anything. A lightsaber is a tool, a weapon to get the job done. It doesn’t think, it doesn’t act, it simply...is. That’s what Ren feels like when fighting. The villagers ask if they can be like that too. Ren chuckles and says it’s probably for the best if they aren’t.

    Ren and Ohkos ambush their enemies (and flirt along the way).

    A young couple asks the Preacher if he can wed them. He hesitates, stating that he’s not that type of official, but agrees to the task. At the wedding, when the Preacher asks if anyone has anything to say, Ohkos stands up. She notes that in her village, when two wed their create new names in order to signify their union. Speaking their new name cements their bond. She encourages the couple to do the same; to forge a new union not only as one family, but with one name. Vexa later notes that this is an interesting custom. As the town parties (both for the wedding for what they see as a fighting chance).

    The Knights of Twilight spend a night together, simply talking and eating.

    Ren and Trayien excuse themselves for a moment, and talk about their master-apprentice relationship and where The Force may be leading them. Trayien is having doubts about sticking around, admitting that she is tired, and just wants peace. Ren notes that peace can’t exist until war brings no glory.

    Towards the end of the dinner, Ren and the Fighter excuse themselves to leave. The Fighter asks Ren to follow her, and together they leave the town.
    They reach a nearby mountain peak. Va Ohkos reveals that she’s not a real Mandalorian. She grew up as a villager on a Mandalorian planet. But she heard if she could kill a Mandalorian, she could become one. Ren how she got the armor. Ohkos admits she took it off a corpse, but she now has a chance to become a true Mandalorian. And she’s taking it. As she says it, The Warlord appears, along with his knights.

    The Warlord notes that Va was supposed to bring more than one Jedi. Ohkos states that she brought the strongest, and she has the plans for the attack. The Warlord praises her and promises that she’ll become a true Mandalorian under his rule. Ohkos pleads with Ren to go with her, but he fights his way back.


    Act 3: Twilight Eclipse

    Synopsis: The Knights of Twilight fight for the lives of those around them.


    Ren returns and tells his allies of Ohkos’ backstory and her betrayal. His allies are as hurt by the betrayal as they are by the loss of their plans.
    They rally the townspeople. As the six await the coming battle, The Sith Inquisitor tells her allies her true name.
    However, as their enemies approach, Vexa notes that they’re following the outline and not avoiding it - Ohkos didn’t betray them!

    Ohkos flies in. Vexa asks about her intentions. Ohkos states that she won’t be accepted as a true Mandalorian if she’s a traitor. So she’s here to fight as a Mandalorian, and die like one if need be. The Knights of Twilight accept her back and fight.

    As the Warlord’s forces lose, the Warlord steps out to fight himself. The Sage, Trayien, and Vexa all engage him at once. He takes down Vexa, kills the Zeffo Sage and duels Trayien, reaching a standstill. One his allies tries to step in, but Ren and Ohkos take him out. Ohkos ends up taking a blast for Ren. As she dies, she claims she loves him and even thought of a name for the pair. Ren picks her up and runs through the town to find the Preacher. He begs him to marry the two, and he does. A building falls on the three.

    Trayien’s duel continues, and she starts to gain ground. The Warlord retreats, but soon sees his loss as inevitable. He goes to the Mystic, ranting about the prophecy. Eventually he gives in and demands that the Mystic repeats the prophecy to Trayien.

    Emerging from the rubble, Ren notes that the Preacher died. He sees Ohko’s body, and regretfully lets her go. He takes off her mask, closes her eyes, and leaves.

    Trayien listens to the Voss Mystic talk about the vision.

    Ren puts on the mask as villagers, forged by the battle, rally behind him.

    The Sith Inquisitor and Vexa get word of something offworld, and turn to rush towards the chapel where Trayien and the Warlord are.

    As they get their, they rush in and reveal that Mandalorians have assassinated the Sith chain of command, and that the Jedi have seized control of Coruscant to stop further violence. The Republic has officially declared war against Mandalore. (The Sith Inquisitor mourns the loss of her Republic.) Both sides have sent their troops to this very town.

    Soon, Ren arrives, the villagers behind him. The Warlord laughs as he sees how he has been played for a fool. Ren calmly steps up to the man, and as the Warlord makes his last remarks, Ren cuts off the man’s head.

    Vexa remarks about how it’s the end of that fight, and wonders what the Jedi will do with her. Ren states that she must go back to her people, as he must go back to his. Vexa asks about the Fighter, Va. Ren tells her that she’s dead. Vexa is somewhat saddened, but not surprised. She offers to take the body and give it a burial of a Mandalorian of the highest order. Ren, touched, thanks her. A life for a life, Vexa says, and leaves.

    The Sith Inquisitor is crying. Her Republic is dead - her actions meaningless. Trayien comforts the woman. Trayien offers her a place as a Padawan, but the Inquisitor refuses...for the time. She must find her own path, and right now, she needs to be alone to do so. The Inquisitor leaves.

    Ren then addresses the villagers. He tells them that the village is theirs, but the war will most likely take it away again. They ask if other villages on other worlds have a better chance. Ren says yes. They ask Ren if he will help them. Rey says yes. Then they promise to follow them to those places. To help others who were like them.

    Trayien notes that the place has passed, but the town lives in its people. Ren sadly notes that he doesn’t see the villagers anymore, only knights. His knights.

    “The Knights of Ren” Trayien muses. “A bit gaudy naming them after yourself, don’t you think?”

    Ren then tells Trayien that the Preacher married him and Va. She spoke their new name to him, and they both died, despite what he did.
    Trayien feels the wind, and as ships approach the land, she asks Ren what his new name is. Ren puts on his wife’s mask and says their name.

    “Revan.”

    END.
     
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    @Use the Falchion .... !!!!

    Wow....

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    Awesome!!! I did not see that ending coming!!!!
     
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    @Lock_S_Foils thank you! It was a blast to write all those months ago lol!

    Well, my travels are over and it's been long enough, so here's the "afterparty" to my post!

    The Pitch:
    Yes, it was inspired by the blurbs for The Stormlight Archive books. I find those well done, and I think they worked wonders here.


    The story:
    Yes, this is a type of Seven Samurai remake and a reintroduction of KOTOR material. It would have been easier to do this with all Jedi as Snyder wanted (or, as my dad wanted instead, Emperor’s Guards who were in hiding after ROTJ - maybe next time, Praetorian Seven!). But I wanted to create an era, a setting to explore, not just a movie.

    I know that some people may want to see how the Sith Republic fell. Well, I have good news for you - TKOT is part of a duology. Heck, I consider it Part 2! ...which isn’t really accurate since the timeframe of Part 1 is actually in-between this movie. (In my head, when the second movie comes out on Blu-Ray/4K/DVD, there’d be an Ultimate Edition where the two movies would be combined into one, 4-5 hour movie.

    Originally this wasn't set as an origin story for Revan. It actually featured an older Revan played by Ken Watanabe and his daughter Satele (at the time played by Chloe Bennet) as they encountered this warlord, but then I realized Chloe wouldn't work, and then the story fell apart when I realized the four countries would actually be two at most during this time period. So I went with a younger version of both and had it as an origin story. I'd still like to see that Old Man Revan storyline someday, but not today.

    After watching the original Magnificent Seven, I also played with adding a storyline of two kids who join the fight as Knights of Twliight. One would take up the role of "the apprentice" found in the original Magnificent Seven. She'd be Trayien's new apprentice, and she and Ren would have a sort of brother-sister relationship. The role of Chico would be blended with the role of the villager woman into a young man who left with droids to find help for his village and wants to fight and save it. Ultimately the two would end the movie together and happy, choosing to stay and rebuild (or at least provide help) instead of joining the war proper. I'm still not sure where I fall on this storyline because while I like it, it feels like too reminiscent of Va Ohkos and Ren's love story; it also takes away time that can be used to further develop characters. We'll see where I ultimately end up.



    The casting:

    I’ll be honest, I rarely do blind casting when coming up with a movie or show or idea. Star Wars in particular is too big a franchise with too volatile a fanbase for me to not try and be aware of any stereotypes or typecasting I may end up with.

    There are more characters than the ones named, such as the Sage and Preacher, but I chose not to put them in the draft so I could focus on the necessary pieces IMO. These characters still play a big role, but since they'll be CGI or in ornate costumes and helmets for most of it, I felt like these roles were more flexible and thus didn't need actors. Preacher is currently listed as played by T.J. Storm in my drafts, but I may want to change that to an Asian/Asian American actor down the line. The Sage has no actor since he's CGI, but I'd probably get an Asian/Asian American actor for the role.

    There are a couple of reasons I went for an Asian and Asian American cast for this movie. Surprisingly, international appeal was number four on the list.

    First and foremost was genre. I wanted a Star Wars film that broke out of the “genre” of Star Wars. Every Star Wars movie has a certain feel to it. This isn’t a bad thing, but I believe it limits what Star Wars can be. I wanted to break those chains. So no major star ship fights, no rebellions up against tyrannical empires. Just soldiers and warriors and fighters up against impossible odds. (Although this may end up looking like Star Wars on a micro scale - a ragtag group of “rebels,” fighting a tyrannical warlord with numbers on his side? That sounds pretty Star Wars-y to me.)

    Second was diversity. This movie isn’t diverse in the classical sense, but in the macro sense. It’s diverse in the same way Black Panther was diverse - it introduces a large number of minority characters into a franchise where said characters have historically been missing.

    This leads into my third point...which admittedly is more like an addendum to the second point - tokenism. For those who don’t know what tokenism is, tokenism is described by Webster’s Dictionary “the policy or practice of making only a symbolic effort (as to desegregate).” Star Wars has been critiqued for it’s approach by both observers of the franchise and by actors within the franchise itself, such as John Boyega last year. Maybe this critique is outlandish to some, especially given the characters of Lando and Mace Windu in the past. Still, I see the reasoning for the complaint and find that some of the feelings come from a place of concern - having one Black person per trilogy isn't a very good case against it either.*

    And while Star Wars is far from the only franchise to have this problem, the gains they’ve made have been, quite frankly, minor compared to similar long-running film franchises - even the Fast & Furious films pride themselves on having a multi-ethnic family.


    So, this was my endeavor to fix that. But what is needed to fight tokenism? To me, it requires two main things: First is main characters with their own, true arcs. We all know the “black best friend” trope, but if a character exists only in that role, then they’re not really a character, they’re a set piece to claim diversity. (The MCU suffered from this for a long time, and I’m still worried about how they'll handle it going forward.) These struggles and arcs don’t always have to be explicitly related to race or ethnicity - that can lead to what is known as trauma porn - but being mindful about incorporating racial themes may be a great way to make characters relatable. ...just be sure that said character then doesn’t become a spokesperson for their culture. That’s still not fixing the issue.

    The second thing fixing tokenism requires is more than one role model. Seeing those who look like oneself in a variety of roles gives viewers a variety of characters to connect to. That’s why I needed an Asian/Asian American Sith, Mandalorian, and Jedi. I needed young fans to not be limited to “I have to like XYZ character because they’re the only one who looks like me,” or “you HAVE to play XYZ role because that’s the only character that looks like you.”

    Lastly was international appeal. Star Wars is an international franchise, and I think it works best when giving all voices a chance to speak and work together. ...I also think that this may help international sales. (Although if I really wanted to go that route, I should have given Rinko Kikuchi the role I gave to Lucy Liu...I’ll try to find a role for Rinko in the second part.)

    That doesn’t mean everything is good and dandy though. There are still downsides to my choices. By casting Asian and Asian American actors and actresses for a more martial arts style film, am I type-casting them or degrading them to stereotypes? Why can’t people of different descent be cast in this movie for the same roles? Am I hurting the fight for inclusion by having this movie take place in the past? Am I really helping if I’m only adding roles in front of the camera and not behind it? Why couldn’t I get Jeremy Lin or Jon Chu or Deborah Chow or any other number of Asian American directors and writers?(Deborah would be busy with Obi-Wan’s series, or his trilogy of movies ideally, but still!)

    What message will people hear instead of what I’m saying? These are things I’d have to struggle with and backlash I’d have to face. The second part of this duology has a more “traditional” Star Wars feel and casting, for better or for worse.

    Other Notes:
    Jeeja Yanin and Michelle Rodriguez would appear as the sort of "heirs" to Vexa's reign. While I think of Vexa as a wolf in a lot of ways, it'd be more accurate to describe her as the alpha lioness.

    Lucy Liu wasn't my first choice for Vexa Wren's role - it was originally Ming Na-Win, but I didn't want to cast Ming while she's already actively involved in Star Wars, so I switched it up.

    I wanted to put Iko Uwais as an actor a stunt choreographer as well as Hannah Beachler for set designer in the draft, but I think not putting them there clears them up for later games down the line.

    The second part of this movie would be directed by Miguel Sapochnick, and the follow-up D+ series that would be a more true-to-form KOTOR remake would be helmed by John M. Chu (aka the director of Step Up 2: The Streets, Crazy Rich Asians, and In the Heights).

    The idea behind the Sith Republic and the Nomadic Jedi came from an earlier idea I had called the Origin Wars. In it, basically the Sith started what we later call the Galactic Republic. The Sith wanted a Republic officially because they felt like they could control things easier that way than any other system. The Origin Wars would be the fall of grace for the Sith as they are toppled by the Jedi. I still really like this idea, but I more or less combined all the good parts into this draft. Oh well.

    Preacher was the hardest to kill off. I really wanted him to live, but I needed this to be far more bitter, and two deaths wouldn't cut it. It was either him or The Inquisitor, and I have plans for her. Maybe. So yeah, farewell Preacher. You will be missed.


    *Star Wars has always had strong women at the center of their franchise, so I’m not worried about that, really. But they have been phenotypically similar. (Half are British, all four are brunettes.) WOC have been mostly relegated to the small screen, and usually are antagonistic to main characters (Fennic Shand’s first appearance; Second Sister; Tora Doza’s nice, but she’s also not really an ally at first; Iden Versio, Rae Sloane, Tam Ryvora, Agent Tierny...it’s funny how many woman who can be identified as Black or dark-skinned are associated with the Empire/First Order…heck, even Jannah isn't fully exempt from that...)
     
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    Bravo! Great job! Your script and story really captured the youthful and earnest heart of Star Wars! I really liked the story of father and son trying to reunite, and how everything ties together in the end. The names of your characters also felt like they could have been inspired from OT and PT characters. Was that the case? It helped create this idea that your story is as old as time itself, but could also be set in the future (ala The Wheel of Time or another famous Sci-fi show that I won't spoil). What was the process like, casting first and then doing the story second?
     
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    Thanks.
    The primary aim was to follow the template of Star Wars as a mythical fairy tale platform, with a secondary aim being to follow Lucas' guidance that every story should be showing some form of a marvel or spectacle. Combined you get that "tale as old as time" yet "wonder on the horizon" mixture that I think sets Star Wars uniquely apart from so many science fiction and/or science fantasy films.

    As to the names, I didn't spend a bunch of research time on the names. I more followed Lucas' pattern of just looking for the sounds that carry a sort of pre-built cultural imprint of expectation in them.

    Olin Lewik was a bit of a tongue-in-cheek tip, however, in that it was a phonetic play on Warwick.

    Mostly, however, it was just what sounds sound like this role?
    The noble woman who should be ruling should be soft sounds. The ruthless general should be hard, "murder" and "kill" phonetics, the pompous wealthy world leader should be Roman-esque in sound like Nero and Julian, but also with a hard consonant of a strong ruling hand so that his relation to the general is understandable.
    Meanwhile the protagonists should have names that are messy, a mixture of sounds from ideas like valor (a noble attribute), and vendetta (an un-noble attribute), so a harder sounding last name that has a slight softness to it...just a touch of edge in that V and D sound, but their first names are all airy and soft as a counter balance because they are who determine if the world in the story will go good or bad.
    Rounding it off, the eccentric wizard, as mentioned, in part is a tip of the hat to the actor, but the rest is designed the same way. It should be more on the airy side, but weird a bit. Luckily, Warwik's name is already a bit unusual so it's just a matter of rounding that off in a light and airy way with an L to get there. Meanwhile his first name is mostly a matter of knowing I was looking for a Star Wars wise and eccentric mentor-like figure here, which of course is a very "Obi-Wan" role, so starting from there, "Obi", but need to flip it so I just borrowed the god of wisdom, "Odin" and then rounding it off with a soft consonant to keep that niceness vibe and so we get an "Odin" that is an "Olin".

    Planet names followed a similar kind of logic.

    As to the process, I always do the same thing in writing.
    I start with "What do I want to say?"
    That is, "What do I want to say to the craft, about society, and about the experience of living?"
    It's a three-layered question.

    Once I know that, then I figure out how to make that into a metaphor. What are the idea symbols that SAY that so that I don't have to say it outright?
    Once I know the ideas of metaphor, then it's a matter of what kinds of characters represents the sides of the argument surrounding that idea as archetypes.
    That is, who's my Bones of emotion and my Spock of rationalism...but for whatever my central idea is.

    This is all about civil war and cultural unrest - an inability to see beyond entitlements and what's due, and it's about the obligation to be involved.
    As such everyone's designed around raising up one of those sides, and their actions are motivated by a need to get each representative character exchanged with a counter representative character.

    When two characters interact, there is the truth between them - not with either one of them.

    The mixture of all of the characters is the dance of the truth of all observations of life and values therein I am conveying as a whole - not by any one of them, or pair of them.

    Yes, I already had a list of actors because the contest had us picking actors before we wrote stories (or...at least...I did it that way because I misunderstood the point at the beginning), but I honestly thought of it as two completely separate tasks.

    When I picked actors, I already knew a basic idea of the kind of story I wanted to tell, and some crude concepts.
    Mostly I picked actors I thought weren't common actors in the American AAA circuit - following another Star Wars tradition from the OT (Ford, excluded - and so maybe a one or two top billers to help the team out) - and to try to get some new people in there as much as possible...or folks who never get these kinds of bills, but could definitely play them.

    Once I had them picked, again, I mostly wrote for the role not the actor.

    Cheers,
    Jayson
     
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    PUMPKIN SEED OIL presents

    TITLE:

    IGNITION OF COURAGE


    CAST:

    Director: Stefan Ruzowitzky
    Writer: Michael Arndt
    Actress: Keisha Castle-Hughes
    Composer: Harry Gregson-Williams
    Cinematographer Roman Osin
    Actress: Letitia Wright
    Prodrucer: Martin Gaiss
    Actor: Christoph Waltz
    Actor: Rege-Jean Page
    Acress: Daisy Ridley



    Pitch - Short summary:

    The Old Mentor (Christoph Waltz) of the three main protagonists - his best students (Keisha Castle-Hughes, Laetitia Wright and Rege-Jean Page) - goes dark after getting captured. Two of them are brother and sister. They get separated during the event.
    Some years later destiny brings them together again only to run into a trap of their former Master.
    It turns out, that all of them have the same goal. Finding an unknown and powerful source of the light side of the force.
    Whereas the three friends hope to join whatever is waiting for them at the end of the road, their old Mentor - full of bitterness and hate - wants to destroy the Light in the galaxy.
    Before getting their hands on the price, the darkened Mentor manages to redeem himself while rescuing his former students.
    The three heroes get a glimpse of Rey, the first of a new Jedi Order, and finally find her.


    PITCH - Full Version:

    Act I
    (Unknown Regions)

    It starts with a Flashback where Ceerol (Christoph Waltz) tells his students a story about how he started as a pupil of a great Jedi called Ezra.
    The scene changes and we see a fight between a troop of dark hooded figures and Ceerol in a kind of huge cave environment who shouts at the group of his young students.
    The kids look at their mentor for a moment who gets surrounded by the dark fellows and, after a moment of hesitation, they start to flee in different directions.
    Two young girls are the first, who recognize that this is the moment to run, one of them cries out for help to Ceerol and they disappear in one of the tunnels at the opposite end of the cave.
    A boy stares at his mentor just for a little longer and as he looks behind him, he starts to scream for his sister, starting to run for himself. Some of the intruders are right behind him, but he is very fast on his feet and also manages to escape in another tunnel.
    The scene vanishes just as we see the moment where the dark robed figures overwhelm Ceerol.

    20 years later, a woman (Rona, Keisha Castle-Hughes) is running from one hiding spot to another in a devastated area of a dark looking and unhealthy glooming planetary setting in a remote edge of the unknown regions and finally we see her risking her life for stealing a sort of food container from a huge futuristic looking overland, kind of wind-turbine driven, transporter. Just a moment before she manages to get her hands on the container she gets in sight of a security system.
    As the alarm starts she gets unexpected help from another woman (Suurin, Letitia Wright) who gives her a rough send off from the vehicle by pushing her while jumping off herself.
    Both have fallen onto a dusty swamp. Rona has a black out after hitting the swamp-ground quite unpleasant. She opens her eyes and recognizes a face, she is strangely famliar with. It is her grown up runaway mate from all these years ago.
    After some other scenes with the reunited women on their run, they finally manage to escape into the woods where Rona tells her long lost friend that she has constant visions of her former Mentor Ceerol who calls her to join him to hinder an unknown threat from destroying a new flame of hope for the Galaxy. He also tells her where to go.
    They manage to steal a spaceship from a local trade company together and head off to find the place of Ronas vision.
    After some adventures they get caught by pirates during a pit stop for recharging energy. Later on, they recognize one of the pirates as being Suurins lost brother Carim (Rege-Jean Page).
    They manage to contact him and all three of them trap the pirates and overtake a freighter to navigate in the direction of the coordinates Rona told them.


    Act II
    (Unknown Regions and Outer Rim of the GFFA)

    They have to navigate through some ancient and rough parts of Space in the Unknown Regions and after reaching an outpost at the beginning of a travel root at the Outer Rim of the GFFA they have bad luck and run into a maroding fleet of former First Order members who took control over a small system of planets and the Outpost there.
    They get imprisoned but Carim manages zu reprogram a droid of the enemy and with the help of the droid's data access they are able to escape on a container transport ship.

    Meanwhile Ronas visions of her former Mentor are still haunting her during her dreams.

    They reach a forgotten world beyond a field of nebula which affects their ships navigation system and they have a hard landing there on a moon of this planetary system near to the Nebula.
    On the surface Rona recognizes that it is a place she saw in one of her visions.
    They finally manage to meet a strange tribe of inhabitants who suddenly flee in terror.

    Our friends get circled by dark figures and they are horrified because it reminds them of the scenery during the introduction scene.
    The "Acolytes" let pass their leader and as he begins to talk, they have to learn that it is Ceerol, their former Mentor, who tells them that he has allready awaited Rona, but now he has the pleasure to find all three of his best former students at one spot.

    Our three heroes lost all their hopes in that moment, as they recognize, that their old Mentor has chosen to join the Darkness and wants to recruit them for his duties.

    He tells them that he is in charge of the last surviving Sith Acolytes now, after the Jedi and also the most powerful Sith Lord of the history have been destroyed during a huge final clash that seemed to end all the years of war in the Galaxy.

    He declares that after uncounted losses, imprisonment and endless torment he was a broken man and only his growing rage and the darkness inside him gave him the opportunity to survive the huge mental and physical massacres and he managed to bind some of his former enemies to his will.

    After the first shock Siruun manages to tell her friends that he was on her own mission all the time.
    She has felt a strong presence in the force a view years ago and since then tried to find the source of it.
    In the same scene we learn that all three of them were hiding their force abilities all the years or just have forgotten about them because surviving was the only goal since their first escape.

    Their old mentor is convinced that he is able to manipulate their minds and he starts to tell them how he managed to find nearly half of his former students and only some of them, who joined him, are still alive.

    They went off to a planet, where Ceerol hopes to find a place with a deeper connection to the force.
    He wants to reach out for a "Source of Light" there, the final goal for his vendetta, because revenge is the only thing left for him that keeps him going.

    They reach Tatooine and Ceerol manages to localize a glimpse of the presence he is looking for (at the ruins of a certain farm). But not only him, also Suurin.
    She starts to think about a way to save whoever their fallen Mentor wants to destroy, together with her friends.


    Act III (Tython, Ahch-To)

    They finally reach the source of the "Energy field" Ceerol (and Suurin) were looking for at the Tython System.

    Ceerol who plotted out his road to revenge for a long time is accompanied by his Acolytes and a fleet of former First Order Soldiers.
    They summon up at one of the moons of Tython (Bogan).
    Meanwhile the still imprisoned friends try to reach out for a now near and strong presence in the Force altogether, but they have troubles to connect willingly after all these years.
    Suddenly all three of them have the same vision of a white cloaked woman. On the following days they discuss about their possibilities to escape and finally they manage to do so while the troops of Ceerol start to mobilize in the direction of the Planet Tython itself.

    When the three reach the planets surface, they - as well as Ceerols troops - run into a storm right away and loose their orientation. Finally they manage to reach out with the force again and find ruins of an ancient temple in a steep valley.

    Our Trio, the Acolytes, the Soldiers and Ceerol are completely off their shoes as they find nobody at the place where they all thought the light energy had radiated from.
    They just find a Holocron within a rodden junk of wood.
    The Acolytes start to outrage and attack Rona, Suurin and Carim.
    As one of the Acolytes smashes Suurin on to a nearby rock and Ceerol finds her lying there with no signs of being alive anymore her former Mentor has a flashback where he sees her as little kid, like back at the day, when they got seperated and she was screaming for help and he suddenly feels all the guilt.
    He radiates huge waves of energy that hits all the Acolytes and Soldiers to the grounds and saves his former students at last.

    After a while Suurin wakes up and has the ability to say goodbye to her once beloved Master. All three of our heroes find the glooming Holocron in the slowly vanishing dusts of the fight. After a quiet moment where the winds blow away the rest of the dust they manage to get their hands on the Holocron all together and they see Rey, who tells them how to find and use another nearby ancient temple on the top of a hill to call her.

    We follow them, climbing up the hill. They reach the top and touch the rock, where Grogu once called Luke Skywalker and have a full vision of Rey (Daisy Ridley) on an unknown planet (Ahch-To), where she is sitting on the rock, where Luke Skywalker once teached her one of her first lessons. She is reaching out for them in the Force with some of her students standing right behind her.

    ..
    Maybe an additional ending scene with the three of them climbing up the "Jedi Steps" with John Williams sound from the last scenes of TFA will be implemented here :D



    .. I am late and I had to copy and paste everything via Mobile Phone, but I did the best I could.. given the circumstances at the moment..
     
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    There is no “late” here….by the way tremendous job!!
     
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    Great job! I like how it ties in Rebels and moves the galaxy forward! The journey of the three apprentices is harrowing, and I like how each has a different focus and specialty within the story. This really feels like it gives us more big screen characters to root for outside of the main ST characters, and that's a HUGE deal, so bravo!
    (And you're never late because you're here!)
     
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    For my 3,000th post I just want to thank everyone that put together a movie pitch they are really cool. And we have some talented folks here! Hey @Jayson do you have your pitch ready?
     
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    "*Star Wars has always had strong women at the center of their franchise, so I’m not worried about that, really. But they have been phenotypically similar. (Half are British, all four are brunettes.) WOC have been mostly relegated to the small screen, and usually are antagonistic to main characters (Fennic Shand’s first appearance; Second Sister; Tora Doza’s nice, but she’s also not really an ally at first; Iden Versio, Rae Sloane, Tam Ryvora, Agent Tierny...it’s funny how many woman who can be identified as Black or dark-skinned are associated with the Empire/First Order…heck, even Jannah isn't fully exempt from that...)"

    What? Yes, Star Wars in the OT has had some women working on it (librarians, Marcia Lucas, etc.), but it was basically a nerdy fraternity of 4-H/FFA hardworking 20s-30s guys who were into modeling, explosions, sound collecting, storyboarding, etc. And the characters themselves were mostly male in the OT, with the exception of Leia, who was also there to defy tropes of the women of the time (i.e. anti-damsel in distress). And Aunt Beru, whom I think is actually unique with her compassion, understanding towards Luke. It's not until we get to Return of the Jedi that we encounter Mon Mothma.

    If you mean in the PT/ST, then yes, there are more women involved, but historically, no.

    Half are British, all four are brunettes

    There are plenty of British-sounding people in Star Wars- I'd think it's hit or miss. Even if they were raised in the UK, they could easily change their accent. Plus, Empire/First Order's accents are typically British.

    Okay, now for my pitch:

    It's a reboot of Return of the Jedi. Simply called: Return of the Jedi, because that's it's original name, not Revenge of the Jedi. It was Lucas who first decided on Return of the Jedi, I think Kanzajian disapproved, then Lucas switched it to Revenge of the Jedi. So, I think that it was changed later back to Return of the Jedi. Anyways,

    RETURN OF THE JEDI
    Director: Irving Kershner (because he should have been on this film!. He had a great deal of perspective that was cut off, with Lucas at the helm/shadow-directing with Return of the Jedi).
    Writer: George Lucas, Lawrence Kasdan, Irving Kershner
    Producer: Gary Kurtz, Howard Kanzajian
    Concept Artist: Ralph McQuarrie, Joe Johnston
    Cinematographer: Peter Suschitzky

    Budget: $45 million in 1985.

    Luke Skywalker: Mark Hamill
    Han Solo: Harrison Ford
    Leia: Carrie Fisher
    Darth Vader: David Prowse/James Earl Jones
    The Emperor: voiced by Clive Revill. The stop-motion/effects are all done by the SFX department/ILM, so there is no primary human actor playing the character- instead it is a mix as in Empire.
    Boba Fett: Jeremy Bulloch in body, voiced by Jason Wingreen
    Lando Calrissian: Billy Dee Williams.

    First shooting unit gets primary focus, so Kershner can call all the shots, without difficulty and compromise. Second unit is needed if necessary, and under Kershner's guidance.

    The script plays out according to the first rough draft of Revenge of the Jedi. But Leia is not Luke's sister. Also, no Ewoks, instead they are a lizard-like race. And there is no Admiral Ackbar. Also, politically, the film ends on a bit of a downer note, despite Vader and Obi-Wan coming back from the dead. Leia becomes queen of the galaxy/of the new Republic, but heart-broken, and unable to be with Leia again from her duty, whom he loves, and disillusioned after the death of Han and the cost of being with the rebel alliance and a mistrust towards Obi-Wan and Yoda after Obi-Wan's and Yoda's silence about Vader's identity, their plans to choose someone else whom they deemed was better/more important than him (the other), and Obi-Wan's condemnation of Luke/not assisting him in Cloud City, Luke chooses to travel the galaxy- his father goes with him.

    Luke is also intelligent, brave, and has the rightful response to his enemies (no eye rolling, or an unintentional holier-than-thou attitude). Also, the clothes do not mimic Vader's or Obi-Wan's as much- Luke is his own man. Also, there is no tension for Luke turning towards the dark side.
     
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